All Comments on 'Wife Pays Default to a Loan'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Not that good!

Kind of weak. Needs more and better content.

Nice story line but needs better background and

a lot more detail. It's close but not there yet.

eddiejoeddiejoabout 10 years agoAuthor
Too True

This was my first attempt which is no excuse. I agree that it is a bit flimsy but I am pleased that the comments said 'It's close but not there yet.' - encouraging response to persuade me to try again.

Thanks

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
I hope that in the sequel

They get divorced.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Good story

I enjoyed your story -- please keep writing. (When I copied it to my list of saved stories, I added some more explicit parts re the sex. That was the only part that I had suggestions for improvement for. The lead-up to the sex was very good, but you short-changed the actual sex part.

ramonbrookramonbrookabout 9 years ago
DAMN GOOD STORY!

I'm hoping that Susie tells more of her story!

5*

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