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Today it is not only got a new baboon to be put in the cage with the others, it came two.

Who knows when they find themselves a keyboard abandoned by their master

This could have been a hot story, but it wasn't well told at all. For example:

"After finally breaking the ice with my wife one night on the issue she seemed excited. We began looking for a third party the following day."

You just skipped over the entire setup of this story -- and arguably the most interesting part of it. That conversation between husband and wife needs to be shared with the readers, as it sets up the rest of the story. We need to understand their motivations and thoughts about taking this huge step, or there isn't anything at stake.

The sex scene also felt rushed, as if you just wanted to tell the story as quickly as possible. Slow down, and provide us with some details and background. Without that, it's just a play-by-play of events and not really a story.

... but I gave it two, just because you were a virgin (at least as far as posting on Literotica)

The story line is hackneyed - look it up - it means "of a phrase or idea - lacking significance through having been overused; unoriginal and trite"

Your writing was pretty mechanical, as if you were following a checklist. Make something new and different happen to your characters - suppose they made a date with "Mike" and he turned out to be a she, and so the wife gets - well, not exactly cuckolded, because that word applies specifically to husbands - but a chance to see if she likes watching as much as doing. She probably would have made some comment to husband who was reluctant about the idea that she would certainly go along with it if it were he that was going to engage in sex with the third person. Or maybe the third person is gay and he and hubby get together - anything but this paint by the numbers story that has been done hundreds - maybe thousands - of times before.

You left out a few cuck items. The bull's cock was only 10 inches only average for a bull. You forget to write that it was a wide a beer can and that he came in buckets. Next time have the hubby get it up the ass and suck off the bull. Maybe you can add later that the slut is cutting hubby off because the bull said so and because having had the bull hubby's tiny (though average) pecker cant be felt anymore

Decent first effort.

All this site needs is another cluck author.

Its all about the details and how you present them. You were repetitious in your 2nd and 3rd paragraphs starting with "My Wife...". You could've gone into detail on how they went looking for another man to add to their life and maybe what that did to their feelings and libido. The one piece of dialogue in here is her exclaiming "holy shit it's huge"? -groan- Show us, don't tell us in that one cliché.

The sex itself in this scene (I am hesitant to call it a story) was subpar at best. I agree with the others in that you need an editor and/or someone to bounce ideas off of to get a better story out of this.

Could use some work. "The thought of starring (do you mean staring?) into her eyes as another man thrusted (thrusted is not a word, try thrust instead) .... is just one example of needed editing.

This is a sharing story. I gave it a 4 for a good first time write. And as I tell all writers, ignore the trolls. They hate the site, hate cuckolding, hate me, hate the admin. But they are dumb enough to keep coming back. lol Anyway, some of the other advice is rather good, so take that to heart and keep writing.

You got some real good advice in the comments written by those who tried to help. You also met the readers of LW who claim not to like our stories, but keep reading them anyway. Do you think maybe they can't find the off button?

Really, you did have a GOOD basic idea, even if it is a well used one, and I applaud you for having the guts to put it out there for the readers. It's surely worth what it cost us and you did have guts enough to sign your work!

This is a decent effort...All done with respect, missing just a little more details about the after...

This is how I have envisioned our first time with another man. We tried this once before and it was a terrible disappointment. The guy was very ugly and drunk. He could not get hard to save his life. The whole atmosphere however was hot! We went home and fucked like crazy for days.

My friend done some building work for us. I asked him what I owed him and he sad£100 or a blow job from your wife. I told my wife about this and to my utter astonishment she said, is be better giving him a blow job and we could spend the£100 on something else. For some reason this turned me on and my cock got hard. I told her to go and put her stockings and suspenders on then come outside. Me and my pal were outside then my wife appeared and said I'm here to pay for the building work. She sunk to her knees and pulled my friends 9" cock out and sucked it like a pro. I couldn't resist and starting wanking. It was the hottest thing I'd ever seen. My friend and I now have regular spit roasting and dp sessions with my wife, the dirty slut. She tells me she wants to fuck all 7 of my close friends

Not a fantastic writing style, but I sure wish my wife would do that.

Love to make guys hard for my wife. She says the best part of threesomes is watching me suck there cocks .

The usual proponents of the swinging, sharing your whore stories support you. No one else seems to.

I would hate to have the fucked-up mind of 26thNC. He hates being forced (FORCED!!!) to read stories of sexual content that he detests. He reads 'em over and over, one after another, making incensed comments over the very things he so much dislikes. Wonder what it really hates; what he says in his comments, or what is said in the recesses of his own troubled thinking? He could and should change his label to 'Closet Cuck', then he would be able to read this "shit", "crap', and 'filth' and slide out from under his need to read and bitch about such writings. Of all the commenters here on Lica, he is the most pathetically troubled. By the way, I don't read anything that I don't have have an open mind about.