by u06la14b
The vocabulary has been mentioned several times. Fancy words do not equate to good story telling. If they are a stumbling block for the reader and break the narrative flow then they do not aid the story. That's beside the fact that some of them weren't even used correctly.
Why is it that when you stumble upon a writer with this skill set, they stop publishing?
I got hooked... and I just stumbled on this...you are one hell of a write...
So far well written and your phraseology is interesting but don't try to tell me you haven't made ample use of your thesaurus. Geez, you kinda go overboard with your use of two dollar words.
Your vocabulary is well beyond that of the average Literotica writer.
I'm sorry I didn't read your stories before. You are really good. Please keep them coming and thank you whoever you are u06la14b!
Good story. Liked it a lot! I think this is the longest one I've read here.
Man, this was good. Enjoyed every aspect especially the sister-brother stuff!
Sexual and emotional tension, physical danger and suspense, excellent grammar, great character and plot development, awesome wordsmithing (hypnagogic, signum), it's all here. I'm eager to get into the remaining chapters. While I'm not a casual user of superlatives, you are one of the best writers on this site. Keep 'em coming!
It's a nice change of pace to read a well-plotted story with a dash of good grammar thrown into the mix. The characters are nicely developed, and their physical and emotional connection is compelling. Well done.
Nice story. It seems I have 5 more chapters to read at this moment, but I can't complain :-)
As shown by his writing
Great story so far keep this series up!
Your writing is easily the best I've read here. Keep the good work coming!
I love how this story is moving along, the flashbacks can be a tad bit confusing but overall, the language is flowing nicely and is kept up-beat...
Well done ;)
I read almost 3 pages until it got dumb sorry it's just to long and through in the dumb and it's just not going to happen
Same story/different title?
This story was placed in the new category several days ago and you posted part two of it also.
Really good read. Interesting style - I like the flashbacks. And, the previous reader is right ... new words! I also like the fact that the sex was part of the story and not the usual fucking, sucking nonsense in most stories here.
I'll read part 2 and add my bit.
New words....I love new words...well they are new to me anyway.
callipygian & irriguous.
I'm going to have fun with callipygian.
No..I'm not mocking you. I love language and the better use of it, but to be honest, it is a rare thing here on LIT.
Oh...and I like your story too. Well written!!