All Comments on 'Winter Turns to Spring Ch. 02'

by JohnnyRD

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redlion75redlion75almost 11 years ago

wife set them up didnt she?

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
editing and proof reading

The story could benefit from editing and a good proof reading to find and fix minor errors that distract. Things like using "come" when referring to an orgasm for which the common slang term is "cum" which also applies to semen. So do a full proof read not once but multiple times to find such errors.

squashmavensquashmavenabout 7 years ago
Can't help but love Rosalind.

Wow! Very nice vicarious experience. Thank you.

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