All Comments on 'Without You I Have Nothing Ch. 13'

I'm sorry I read this far. One unbelievable emotional crisis after another just gets tiresome. Two supposidly intelligent people who proclaim thier undying love one moment and hate each other the next. This reads like a soap opera script, but it would have been rejected, as being even too melodramatic for that venue.

This chapter is in the wrong category.

Please put this to rest, your work is getting more confusing and rambling with each chapter. Please sit back and read some of the other GOOD authors out there to get an idea of story crafting. Authors like Sweet Witch, S Des, rgjohn and youbadboy to name just a few. A story needs a good plot with everyday believable characters with normal emotions, none of which can be applied to you submissions.

Even Samual X's stories have ten times more readability than your stories and that must be some of worst stories on site

Let me guess, retired and with nothing to do other than watch soap operas all day. Then after overdosing on heart medication had this brilliant thought - I WILL WRITE A STORY TO ENTHRALL AND AMAZE. What awesome future revelations lie in wait - when will it be revealed that Peter is really Bruce Lee and Jennifer is actually Scarlet O’Hara that was caught in a time warp when lightning struck the burning mansion. Yeah right, even Small Ville is more believable than this

The words make it a lot of fun, but

it should be taken with amusement in one's

heart.

Poster is wrong, it's the ROCKY HORROR PETER show

I can see Peter in drag chanting : " it's just a jump to the left " while despatching the baddies with one flick of his chopstick.

Jennifer as Damm it Janet maybe or do you think she would make a better Magenta?

So far the comments get a rating of 100 - please dump the story but keep the comments coming as they are much more lucid and entertaining

This is one of the best stories thet I have seen on this site. The people who put it down should shut up and go read other stories. I for one wish you to go on with this and look forward to the next chapter.

But I kinda like to see where this history is going to end. I kinda like stories where the good guy ends up in love with the lady in distress, and vice versa.

I think these two have gone through so much wild things in their lives, and are so damaged, they might actually be perfect from each other, as long as they recognize their own failings and the failings of each other and stop being dumb about it. I feel like the web is untangling, and that the story will be finished soon, or at least I hope so, cause nothing would be worse than an overextended soap-opera.(I am not an great soap-opera fan, much less those with 300 chapters of twists and surprises...)

but, it is highly unpredictable. The lead characters are very complicated. The writing is froth with cultural nuances. I like many of the authors on this site for their perspectives in bring a story together. However, I find some authors write to please their audience. I am enjoying the action and romance of this story. I look forward to reading it everyday.

I read chapter 1 and was mildy confused but gave the story a chance to progress, next was chapter 5 which was going round in circles then chapter 9 confirmed it. The last chapter, for me in any case, is like Shakespear said, much ado about nothing. It took 13 chapters to get to this point with everyone still acting like spoilt 13 year olds. Sorry but I don't have the time and patience to wait for chapter 188 to wind things up

"Shut up, Jennifer. Stop carrying on like some teenage virgin who can only giggle and talk about boys."

what??? This line was soooooo random in the middle of the story.

This story is full of poor writing and randomness. This quote is just one example to caqpture the poor plot development, the crazed emotions of the characters and the rambled, convoluted story line.

Ah, C C R - " Look at all the happy creatures dancing on the lawn." I read the first couple of chapters and could not make any sense of it but then I got some of that green stuff we smoked in 'Nam and now everything makes sense. WOW, just saw Peter takin a ride on the flyin spoon. Regrettably each time the stuff wears of I'm still confused.

Can this story be used in court to mitigate why I need to be high to understand it ?

I'm struggling with this now.... Your characters are bouncing from one cisis to the next with no concept of reality. " JAScooter" you need to plan your scenarios better than this. There are 19 more chapters to go 'DO I feel Lucky' and contine hoping that the story line gets better OR Ditch the sory now.

Disappointed with the high ratings so far.

I'll give you the benefit of the doubt ...and continue

Juvenile characters, 11 year old's in adult bodies and aussie's just don't talk and act this way. T

You have fallen for the myth that the khukuris must draw blood if un-sheathed. In Nepal they are an every-day tool.