by Kaysdream43
Will love conquer everything? Both women are loved. Can we look forward to a happy ending for both couples?
I think this entire series is very well thought out and well written. It is a nice theme. It has been developed very nicely. It is really gripping. It is coming from a middle aged white woman!
Even though the stories on this site are sexual fiction, I'm finally glad to see a strong, big dicked brother, written to be intelligent, loving, and sexually attentive to the needs of his white female love. No thuggish, ghetto, hit and run, degrading treatment of his white love. Didn't need the X, but great story! Curious to see where you take the characters.
I think you need to give each couple their own story. Let them grow and experiment without becoming an intimate four-some beyond suggestive comments... Perhaps explore the wonders of pregnant and postpartum bodies. Leave some suprises for down the road.
This like its predecessors is,Incredibly BORING and totally PREDICTABLE sorry but it totally lacks substance as well as lacks tension, as well as transition, this is more in line with "Once upon a time...."
Even Leave it to Beaver Had Eddy Haskle for tension in the show! "Golly Wally! Gee Beav.......!
Do appreciate the good grammar usage and that it is not full of spelling errors.
Personally , I want to see the next chapter... the one where Kay Miller divorces Jaime and becomes Kay Thomas.
Why do people leaving comments on this website all seem to think they are reading news reports, not fiction? At least the second commenter sort of made logical sense, unlike the first who apparently thinks it's still the 1950s and sex between consenting adults over 18 is illegal unless he approves it.
Would the joy of knocking up these women still be as much fun after they got hit with court ordered child support payments? I have met a guy that was paying $1500 a week per kid (he had 2) till the kid was 21.. That would take a bite out of any NFL contract. That's $78,000 a year. On top of that if you don't pay you get jailed.
Jamie could easily destroy their worlds. All he would have to do is say what happen they did on a school trip. She would lose her job. He would lose his football scholarship for embarrassing the university. That means no pro ball. They have more to lose then he does all he will lose is a used up slut.