by Laila432
I'm very eager to hear more of these two and to see how their love develops or whatever you have planned for them.
Good start like the others said a little short but definitely has possibilities
That's it? Not even long enough to get in to it, let alone get you to read the next chapter.
Nice start, but too short to tell. I gave it four stars, because the potential for a very good story is there, but please write more than one page next time.
You did well for a first start. I didn't notice spelling mistakes but a few grammatical errors. I suggest having someone proofread it if you don't already. Look forward to the next part.
Story too short I don't even know the plot or where you are going with it. The next chapter should be much longer and more detailed. Background on how you got to where you are at now.