All Comments on 'Yo-yo Chronicles Ch. 05: Adam and Eve'

Throw in this churchy thing and I'm left more than a little bewildered. I'm not a Christian; but attended as a teen and I've never heard of this kind of behaviour. It seems very...unchristian like.

Or maybe I just didn't get wood from reading it.

God forgive me, I hated this perverted shit.

As usual, well written. Obviously, warped. Adam clearly should have left this bitch. It was obvious that she was manipulating things from the very beginning to get the video made. She acknowledges it was evil, but still holds on to it. Not exactly sure what you were trying to communicate through this story. This family is clearly not christian in any sense of the world. Cultic, yes. Christian, no.

Another awful totally crap story. I started reading hoping for......

Absolutely worthless and sick.

wow,...

This is the most preposterous rubbish and yet I had to find out how these people ended up. You must be doing something right.

The majority of stories posted anymore don't even deserve that. It seems loving wives is turning into "cuckerotica".

If you love someone set them free. If they dont come back hunt them down and and kill them. Adam should just skip to the end and find a nice spot to dispose of the bodies. Also Brazil is really nice most times of the year. Adam should take a trip.

just look up xleglover stories and ukreseacher they always get one bombed

Those two fucking idiot could add their IQ's to total 11 if they tried.

It's a little hidden message for all the hubbies involved who might believe their wives are on their side:

You're

On

Your

Own

Same stories over and over and over again. Gets some new material Ed. And write some stories that make some sense. Why do the men in your stories NEVER take the video away from their bitch wives? It's a simply thing. Either search the house when she's gone or grab her hand and start breaking fingers until you have all copies of the videos in your hands. NEVER WRITE AGAIN ED!

Too bad.

And it seems to me that the more pious they are, in truth the more of a hypochriiical cunt they are.

So I would have no problem in dragging Eve and her boyfriend out into the desert, staking them out in the sand and watching as they both fried to death.

I would even read the bible to them as they both died.

As for the story, pure shit!

That author is the lowest piece of brain sick people!!! He needs religion to jazz up his crap!! He has realised that his writing is one of the most boring thing on literotica and to thrill his pervert fans he used religion!!! But it is still only laughable!!!

It is, because I have never heard a story or read one that used the bible to quote passages while their husband was getting plugged in the butt. This has to be a good story, but for the life of me, just too much holy bull shit, as far as I'm concerned.

She got turned on watching a porno, told her husband, and wanted more, she just needed a reason to ask for it. She got to plan out the whole ordeal for hubby, gee, sounds like a dream come true for her. All the holy roller shit was just filler, what for, I don't know. I could have been a much better story without all the Christian stuff.

Could not finish it

Dialogue is terrible..long and drawn out....

You have gotten so many negative responses for your writing that its obvious you wanted that type of attention, so you win.

Ed Rider writes nothing but disgusting, sick, man-hating feminist and gay fetish stories. The same thing over and over. Notice the "Similar Stories" box in the right-hand column; Matt Moreau's stories are listed over and over. LOL, no surprises there.

Ed Rider and Matt Moreau: Sure, they only write gay fetish torture porn, but at least they're consistent. Way to go girls!

In a lot of these stories the women have videos. I'll never understand why the husbands don't get the video and give it to the police and their lawyers? It solves ALL their problems. The wives and accomplices go to prison and the husband get a divorce while keeping all the marital assets. This was just plain stupid.

Me, I'd of packed my stuff and left the country for good. Leaving no way to find me, ever.

I felt uncomfortable during the whole thing. I read these stories to get an emotional response, so I think it was a good story. 5 stars.

Adam needs to run. Grab the kids and run.

Eve is bad for him, and everyone around her.

Knock her out, hog tie her and throw her in the trunk. Hit him in the back of the head with a baseball bat as gets into or out his car. Do the same. Drive out the most desolate part of the country. Tie one up to a tree. The other as well. Burn the both alive. Him first so she can watch.

Live happily ever after!