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All Comments on 'You, Me & My Mom'

by MrFantasies

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Epiphany_JonesEpiphany_Jonesabout 9 years ago
I have no patience for First Person Present Tense, but you made this more palatable by at least using Past Tense.

It still was a little too much "stream of consciousness" for me to really love it. You could have been a little more descriptive, but you honestly did do a nice job here. I'll give it four stars, and hope you'll get better with more practice.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
One of the best

One of the best stories that I've read in a while. Thank you

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
Do you know grammer or know how to spell?

Yes I liked the story but spell check it and proof read it, please. Thank you for the story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago

are you reding the story or marking 4 A GCSE

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Well it could have been good but... the constant use of 'you' killed it

AnonymousAnonymous10 months ago

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