All Comments on 'You Never Even Wrote Ch. 02'

he needs to get past the fact that shes not a child anymore before he can feel anything for her, he even says, i know i feel something for you too but i have to get used to the fact that your not the little girl you used to be. he didnt feel for her back then, he does now. i dont condone any type of kiddie porn and this story is not that.

And he had feelings for her as a 19 year old man when she was 9? That's all I'm getting from this story since you said she's now 19 & he would be almost 30 at this point....

More sensory details during sexual scenes! >.<

I like the story, but it seems just a bit rushed and might benefit from some additional scene building and dialog.