by cnhemingway
I knew Jackson was up to no good. But I thought it was no more than some cheating.
There is some confusion with whom Deacon and Declan is. Was there a typo with the names?
The transition from one scene to the next don't flow that well. It was pretty much that way through the whole chapter.
Deacon ???? Declan ???
Did I miss something?
Watch for continuity.
{Personal Note: Education First, Needing to work (even two jobs) a necessary second, Slowing down to continue to write a beautiful story, a thirdly passion}
Five Stars on where this story is going.
I didn't notice until you guys brought it to my attention! When I did a final read through before submitting it I didn't even see it then. His name is Deacon, I have no idea how my brain jumped to Declan, but I apologize greatly for it. As for the scene transitions, I separate each scene with asterisks but they don't seem to show up when published. I will try to figure that out, I know it helps to have clear defined scene transitions when reading.
Again I am so sorry for the flaw in continuity and I will make sure it doesn't happen again!
I am absolutely knee deep in this story.... Each chapter gets better and better... Keep up the greay writing.
IndianChocolate
Minor errors don't worry me, even the transition problems don't bother me. I am loving this story and the direction it is going. I want Stepen and Christina happy, and whole together. Deacon , Jackson and Mr. Basin better watch out!
5 stars!
Just wish you'd put a divider when switching between characters>_< (symbol etc.)