All Comments on 'Your Love Ch. 05'

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crazysexykool93crazysexykool93over 8 years ago
Can't Wait!

I am looking forward to reading what happens next!

ariesgirlariesgirlover 8 years ago

I knew Jackson was up to no good. But I thought it was no more than some cheating.

There is some confusion with whom Deacon and Declan is. Was there a typo with the names?

The transition from one scene to the next don't flow that well. It was pretty much that way through the whole chapter.

senilissenilisover 8 years ago

Deacon ???? Declan ???

Did I miss something?

Watch for continuity.

{Personal Note: Education First, Needing to work (even two jobs) a necessary second, Slowing down to continue to write a beautiful story, a thirdly passion}

Five Stars on where this story is going.

cnhemingwaycnhemingwayover 8 years agoAuthor
HUGE APOLOGIES

I didn't notice until you guys brought it to my attention! When I did a final read through before submitting it I didn't even see it then. His name is Deacon, I have no idea how my brain jumped to Declan, but I apologize greatly for it. As for the scene transitions, I separate each scene with asterisks but they don't seem to show up when published. I will try to figure that out, I know it helps to have clear defined scene transitions when reading.

Again I am so sorry for the flaw in continuity and I will make sure it doesn't happen again!

IndianChocolateIndianChocolateover 8 years ago
LOVE LOVE LOVE

I am absolutely knee deep in this story.... Each chapter gets better and better... Keep up the greay writing.

IndianChocolate

blueexoticablueexoticaover 8 years ago
So Good

wow this is getting better and better... Thanks

KittyOh48KittyOh48over 8 years ago
Awesome Story !

Minor errors don't worry me, even the transition problems don't bother me. I am loving this story and the direction it is going. I want Stepen and Christina happy, and whole together. Deacon , Jackson and Mr. Basin better watch out!

5 stars!

sshh1sshh1over 8 years ago
more please

Can't wait to read the next chapter

TherapeuticreadingTherapeuticreadingover 8 years ago
Love thisss

Just wish you'd put a divider when switching between characters>_< (symbol etc.)

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SUP friends! So I graduated from college! (finally) And starting grad school in the fall! As far as writing goes my plan is to continue working on the Hungry for Love series. <3

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