All Comments on 'Zoey's Punishment'

Love it,want more

This was boring. Nothing was described which was unusual, or erotic

Welcome to Lit. You posted a good first story that would be improved by more attention to punctuation. Specifically, you need to offset prepositional phrases with commas. Some backstory to put Marie and Zoey into context would help the reader engage more with the story. That said, I encourage you to keep writing.