by wishfulthinking
Ian so tired of the rough, forced, etc stories that most writers put on this site.
This storyline has a good flow, the people are believable, and it has a very cute ending. Thanks. v
The story was extremely awesome...the way it progressed, the characters, the ending, everything, just mind blowing. Truly, I loved it!
I read through all of your Novice chapters (& I'm normally not a chapter reader on here) and like many, I anxiously await what comes next. I also decided to try this short story of yours. I'm very drawn to your writing style, plenty of details but not too "wordy" in descriptions that it detracts from the pace of the story. I very much look forward to reading (& admittedly pleasuring myself at times) the rest of your work and anticipate the continuation of Novice.
I wholeheartedly approve, although I wonder what you mean by 'football'. Great story though.
All of this person's writings have the same black haired, green eyed guy, and the same sayings of 'little one'. While the girl is always blonde haired... three stories have had a Kate in them so far, it makes it hard to relate and delve into the story when all I think about during a new one is the old one, which makes me end up losing intrest in it.
It really was so sweet and I love to hear things like this sometimes! When its been a long bad day then this is perfect!
This is definitely one of the hotter stories I've read on Lit. You should write novels. I would be a definite fan!
...and I know that because your writing is sexy! Great job hon!
I think you should continue with the story....and not just end it where its at...other than that I LOVED IT!!!!!...
...safe sex?! Loved the story, but would have loved it more if I didn't have to worry that sweet Adam would give our heroine god-knows-what...
This has a sweet quality in it... and the sex was great. I really think you should write a book. This is so... dear. Hoping for a sequel.
Rock on ;)
Hope you have a fab nude day 2004! Thanks for all who read, voted or left a public comment on my comp entry, WT.
A great opening, good build up, and a nice ending. In all, a well-written fun read. Keep up the good work.
Rumple Foreskin :cool:
awesome story. great build up. one can only hope to be as good a writer as you undoubtedly are.
You truly deserve to win this contest, this was a great story. I am so glad to see a story where a virgin has sex for the first time and it actually hurts as all women know it does, instead of like the men's version where they distract the virgin and slide it in with no trouble. Though I wish my first time had been as hot as this, instead of two inexperienced fools fumbling around together. Thanks for an enjoyable read! Shall remember your name for more interesting reads in the future.
Very sexual story nicely drawn out and described. Made me wish I was that age again! Thank you.
I liked the scene setting for this story and the tension between the two of them.
Conflict always adds to a story and you handled it beautifully. Congratulations.
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Once again you're stories have caught me off-guard and taken me away to a place I only visit in my dreams. The sensations, and words, and the style of writing is incredible! C'est magnifique! *mWaHz*
I wish my first time had been like this, too! Not lame...not lame at all - very sweet and sexy.
I was a cheerleader but my first time was nothing like this. Too hot!
It's just so sweet, although I kind of wondered if that cheerleader was trying to get with him. *kicks her*
You just keep pumping out the classics, time and time again.
I think Wishfulthinking just opened up another can of worms cause I'm wanting a chapter 2 of this story!
That is, of course, once she's off her break ;)