Poetry Comments & Feedback

5/5! Wonderful! Again, again!

"Cunt First" sounds like a kind of "Rule of Good Manners.": Ladies First. Great!

Everything is perfect except "I cry for help." I rarely cry, but especially never "for help," and then it doesn't rhyme with tits-bits-help-kiss.

In a world where any...

that's beautiful

Simply beautiful.

Beautifully written and my favorite position. xo

The empathy here made me tear up. This is truly beautiful.

Thank you Charlie ❤️

Thank you Pixie x

Such brutal emotions. It made me cry xxx

I love this Tasha. Such lovely sentiments xxx

Beautifully written but heartbreaking 💔 xxx

WHEW!! SO HOT!!

I love naughty girls. (LOL)....well written. I love this.

Hot, sexy & sensuous.

So HOT & SEXY!!

Very romantic & beautiful.

Strength, power & courage in a poem. I love this.

Reminds me of relationships I had that just didn't work. Well written.

Another one of those WHAT IFS...I LOVE IT.

Different & provocative. I like this

It's good to have enbiji back after too many months' absence. As always, her poem is affecting in many places and structurally interesting everywhere. The sprightly dactylic couplets neatly fit the lyrical description of lesbian love and lovemaking with which the poem begins. Then...

Liked the premise and last line, but for me could not feel what you wanted to share about him/about her. Aside: imagine you have a poem entitled “Lust” and if so imagine it would be erotically moving; moving like your other poems.

Powerfully telling last line. Thought provoking while moving poem.

Very moving; the title captures the poignant pain. The line “Deep despair painted you dull and washed the last bit of brightness from your eyes.” easily felt.

Great! the triple internal rhyme "make-wake-ache" is magnificent!

I don't want to annoy you, but there was also a fourth internal rhyme, for example with "fake": like "it was not fake" or "holding a fake / penis."

Kudos! you are very good as a poet!

oh yes, indeed ... nicely written and a lovely morning event

Excellent work, Mark. I love the natural and sensual images in this piece. Your vivid depth of water, fire, sight, sound, touch, and taste evoke beautiful sensations of intimate love and sex.

*****

Here are a few of my favorite parts:

A siren's spell calling to his deepest hungers...

That was incredible. You have a unique gift. Not every author I read can make me feel things like you do.

Thank you <3

This is really lovely Kat. Your girl is very very lucky to have you xxxxxxxx

Very nice.

Nice view.

Very intoxicating.

Very beautiful & touching.

It can be so hard my dear 💕

There is more hope here, my darling Tasha xxxxx