All Comments on 'An Adventure in Minot Ch. 02'

You should keep writing. One little niggling observation, if you don't mind. In your story, you wrote "the door knocked". Do they? "There was a knock from the other side of the door", might be better. Still...about a paragraph later, I was slipping my finger into my silk panties, imitating the very things you did to me in Minot. Or...what I wish you'd done. Story made me wistful. When did you say you'll be coming through again? Please keep writing, and thanks for another warm evening.

Well done, as was the other one. Good story, well executed. Thank you, sir.

I really enjoyed this! Please continue..