by UlyssesSwanson
It's not erotic
Based on what we've seen so far, I have no interest in seeing what mom will do next.
The image of her drunk, sitting on the sofa, smoking, with her finger stuffed up her pink asshole, would inspire me to request early entry into the Army.
Two totally unlikable characters, mother and son
Two smart characters, dad and Amanda
Everyone starts someplace, I liked it... keep going.
Ah screw all those asshats. You keep writing,. Your story is kinda short, sure, but promising.
Not a terrible premise for an erotic story, just executed really, really, horribly badly. At least you've got a fairly unique name. That'll make it easier to remember to NOT read anything else you post.
At least he tried. The basis of his story was good.
If you can do better then step up.