All Comments on 'Double or Nothing Pt. 01'

Great start. I can’t wait to see where this series goes.

I know that I've read this before, a very good story. I've had several professions in my life, plumbing among them. You earn every dollar paid and then some. Thank you, 5 stars

somewhere east of Omaha

5 Stars on one of the best stories here . Keep up the good work

Still one of my favorites after all this time and all the times I came to read it again. It still gets me incredibly emotional which just proves to me how memorable and all consuming this story has continued to be.

Lexi

I quite enjoyed the story itself, but I'm alarmed to think you might have wasted very much time or money on the services of an editor (as implied in your introduction).

I like the story; this is the second or third time I have read it. You express the indignation, anger and despair Terry feels very well. But I agree with Anonymous 1 month ago, you either need a copy editor or find one who is competent. The average of one grammatical or spelling error per paragraph is unacceptable (or should be to any self respecting author). Do you actually read over anything you have written? Such errors break up the flow of the narrative and while there are probably many readers whose understanding of English is such that such issues pass them by there are also many who find them an unnecessary distraction.

I don't wish to sound too much like the grammar police, but if you are paying an editor, find one who is worth the money. Rant over. It's a great story for which I thank you; I shall keep reading with pleasure.

7527Crater

that's a very good start

First, he never should have signed the adoption papers. A 13 year old child is easily manipulated (she was 13 when Carol started her affair). The brat was swayed by the glamour of something new and the game of keeping secrets from daddy.

Second, he should have encountered the sleaze bag doctor in a dark alley with a pipe and beaten the shit outta him. Then dragged his carcass to the woods and dumped him for the wildlife to feast on. I’m sure he could have come up with some way to secure a solid alibi….

This is the first of your stories that I have read keep up the good work Lizzie another Aussie

Too much deliberate pain and humiliation. For a hard working bloke to be blindsided by a narcissistic, greedy and status hungry wife and daughter, is too much to bear. The arrogance and rude rival doctor cannot professionally claim, "do no harm"...