by marriedbuthoping
Wonder what motivated the writer to waste readers time with this rubbish? Unbelievably awful, no build-up, no context, even fantasy needs some grip on reality.
Now go away please and don't come back.
I was so surprised by the comments I went back and reread the story... and I still don't get it. It's a perfectly nice straightforward male fantasy story, better written and better spelled than at least half the stuff on this site.
Yes, it's not great literature. Yes, it would be a better with a little more build up. But it's a reasonably well executed mainstream stroke piece. I don't understand the venom. 'Go away please and don't come back'? What on earth is that about?