by marriedbuthoping
I was so surprised by the comments I went back and reread the story... and I still don't get it. It's a perfectly nice straightforward male fantasy story, better written and better spelled than at least half the stuff on this site.
Yes, it's not great literature. Yes, it would be a better with a little more build up. But it's a reasonably well executed mainstream stroke piece. I don't understand the venom. 'Go away please and don't come back'? What on earth is that about?
Wonder what motivated the writer to waste readers time with this rubbish? Unbelievably awful, no build-up, no context, even fantasy needs some grip on reality.
Now go away please and don't come back.