by Lady_Fiona
To much pain. The story was unbalanced. I kept reading for things to get better but they only became worse. It was a sad story. No respect for the lady. No respect for their agreed safe word. In many ways this story is like the world sometimes. Just sad.
I'd like to do to him all he did to her for not respecting the word! I hope she doesn't go back.
Writing style ok but stay clear of subjects you obviously know nothing about.
Though I can't say I liked it all, I thought this was well written, very descriptive and the twist at the end wasn't expected. No doubt some people will judge this story on it's rather agressive content but I'm sure not every Dom/sub relationship is all whips and roses? From a writing point of view it was a great story.
Clearly a very disturbed and angry young lady who understands little about the beauty and intimacy of a sub/dom relationship.
I've rated this in the middle because "unknown" is not an option. This story is very well-written and flows smoothly. I try to not comment too much on content as that is not helpful for authors to receive as feedback, but I'm very troubled by the story so I'm not able to focus beyond it at this point. I promise to try to comment again once I can.