by CronustheTitan
the name calling was unnecessary, story was hot enough as it is.
It didn't add anything hot, to it.
A scenario where that name calling could've worked if he forced her or the interracial card.
That was a sick, nasty, piece of shit. Not one redeeming factor in the story.
Total fucking rubbish Never read anything so bad
It turned her up a Notch. if it was such a Disrespect she would'dt have let him Finger her or Lay there as He Speared her. She wanted All of It.
Except for the following type insults:
"you dirty whore, and you're just a cheating housewife"
That disrespect toward women is uncalled for so I rated the story 1*.
A terrific story - nothing quite so delicious as inseminating a woman and your description is fabulous.
the next time, seek an editor and make sure you get all of the characters straight. By the way, who is Roy?
Have you EVER heard anyone say "we mustn't" in real life? If it was a period piece, I could maybe see it being used, but this wasn't and it's pretty jarring to read as a result.
Don't much like cheating wives nor cheating husbands. If you don't like your situation at home change it. Sure, a person can get caught up in the moment and make a major mistake, but here we see them planning to continue the relationship...so, consequences would be nice for both of them.
....and leaves no room for arousal unless you are dysfunctional enough to identify with one of these creeps.
Lovely stroke story. I'm going back and reading more of your stuff. As a reader, I tend to read from categories that appeal to me. Mind control is one that generally does not.
That was definitely some hard sex they both had. Well written and it seemed so real. Thanks for sharing you writings.