All Comments on 'Hold Me'

a good start but way too short....can't wait to read more and hope the next chapter will be longer....

Nice start.. Making me want to know what happen after.. Keep writing please

A very well written story. Short but that leaves us waiting anxiously for the next chapter.

anxiously awaiting the next chapter!

Happy Writing!

Oh man what a good start. I thought it would be longer but it keeps me wanting more. It seems as if it is going in the right direction and I can't wait for more!! Happy writing!

NOW! MORE PLEASE! No distractions, no waiting games, no more waiting!! GIMME MORE!

I want to read more of this :)

Hooked, want more :)

Great start to your story! Can't wait to read more about Gabe and Davis.

Happy writing=)

Love and Light

Khepri

Okay, you got my attention :) so I'll definitely be checking back in for more. Can't wait for the next chapter - I'm really interested in seeing these characters fully fleshed out (loving Davis, by the way).

Blessings,

AH

Flesh out your story with a bit more detail. Your characters are attractive. Tell us a bit more about them from day 1. At present each installment is a bit short, not even enough to fill a single page. Don't be impatient to publish: get a bit more into each episode. But certainly keep on writing, we all want more!