All Comments on 'Hold Me'

Flesh out your story with a bit more detail. Your characters are attractive. Tell us a bit more about them from day 1. At present each installment is a bit short, not even enough to fill a single page. Don't be impatient to publish: get a bit more into each episode. But certainly keep on writing, we all want more!

Okay, you got my attention :) so I'll definitely be checking back in for more. Can't wait for the next chapter - I'm really interested in seeing these characters fully fleshed out (loving Davis, by the way).

Blessings,

AH

Great start to your story! Can't wait to read more about Gabe and Davis.

Happy writing=)

Love and Light

Khepri

Hooked, want more :)

I want to read more of this :)

NOW! MORE PLEASE! No distractions, no waiting games, no more waiting!! GIMME MORE!

Oh man what a good start. I thought it would be longer but it keeps me wanting more. It seems as if it is going in the right direction and I can't wait for more!! Happy writing!

anxiously awaiting the next chapter!

Happy Writing!

A very well written story. Short but that leaves us waiting anxiously for the next chapter.

Nice start.. Making me want to know what happen after.. Keep writing please

a good start but way too short....can't wait to read more and hope the next chapter will be longer....