by HornyNightPanther
All the potential to entertain lost on lack of editing. Just take your time, your readers don't have to cum in less than seven minutes. Let it breathe a little and smooth out the little things. But I agree with the prior comment, fake women stand out in prose. What do they really look like?
I realize it's been a long time since this was written, but it's really very good, and a continuation would be great.
its hot.. everything happen a lil fast for my taste but it made me wet
Man, that was great! I agree, it's a great start to a series. Any chance of more?
Very good and hot start. You have laid a reasonable groundwork for what could be an awesome series. Please continue. Add Mom, sisters, etc as needed.
but 26/28c?.. what's that in height? 4'5"?.. it's nearly impossible to have such a small body..