by LadyAurora39
I love that you don't sugar coat the fear or helplessness felt by the women in your sonrĂes. I look forward to reading all of your pieces here.....and getting to see your.picture every time l post a comment.
Although you seem to be able to write...ALL of your submissions are left unfinished and just hanging. None have the feel of an end or any conclusion.
A pity really as it's impossible to actually say whether or not you have any real talent as much of that is how one pulls the loose ends together into something great.
If you title as Ch. 01 be prepared to continue and finish like a real writer does otherwise why waste everyone's time (including yours). Quite frankly readers are extremely tired of this happening and finding other authors or even other sites for their reading pleasure.
This may be an old submission but still available to read. Unfinished entries such as this should be pulled after such a long time.
I like most of your stories, the only thing I could say would be you have to many that seem unfinished and that's sad.
you should write more to this one. it is really good and i would like to see what happens next
A little more build up would be nice but overall great for a quick jerk!
I liked your story about Mina's abduction and I look forward to your next installment. The idea of her being shared with another by the ex against her will had some dark appeal and I enjoyed that. Thanks!