by portlanddrew
too much of a downer. They could have lived a happy sharing life....
No need to kill off a loving happy person.
Good story and you will get better and better with time and learning as you write. Just wish I could write but then they would jump me for not going to school.* lol
Keep on and I will look for your next story.*
Thanks. JAG
You wrote a pretty good story. It's a simple one. You show lots of promise as a writer. Ignore the previous commenter. While it's true the story is a simply written one, all writers start from a beginning, and if they choose, can (and will) improve over time. Hope you have more stories in you, and that you'll write them.