All Comments on 'Nightmare'

Nine months later and the baby daddy is in jail

Interesting premise, however, the grammatical errors were distracting. Could benefit from an editor.

I really enjoyed being a little lost (much like Riley) at the start!

Only suggestion would be more backstory/build-up; how long have they known each other, he been lusting after her? What about that first meeting with her turned him on? What makes him want her so badly/over his wife? Why NOW? You’re a skilled story weaver, so I know you could easily add that info in a line here, a couple there...

I’d love to hear her “tell all about it” and hear how easily he soothes her fears/embarrassment over the phone, all the while reliving the imagery she’s relaying (pleasuring himself maybe?) and finally, whether it really happened!

Five stars!