All Comments on 'Payback - Ten Fold and Then Some'

Not enough hurt on Lexi.

I’m confused. Is he in a three way relationship with Michelle and Melissa?

Too much mystery around why Lexi went off the rails. It really brought the story down.

Good ending to a sad story. Wish you were still writing.

Great writer!!! You forgot the very name of your character! Michelle became Melissa... Shoot!!! Horrendous finish for a horrendous story!!!

I liked it, it did put a deep hurt into sex workers though, they do a decent job, not for many but if hubby knows what they are doing and go along with it, no problems as far as I'm concerned.

As a plot line, good, but short but you covered the bases.

Sad. Good story thank you. One thing, I had to really work hard with the dialogue - who was talking or texting - was confusing

Needs some closure

Michelle Meliisa??

Dislike.

jopstorm1945

Also, I didn't read the original, but what's with all the hate for sex workers? They don't cheat anyone, lie to anyone, or hurt anyone. They literally provide honest service, for a fee. Nothing more.

I can maybe sorta see a reason to be unhappy when the customer is married - but the problem isn't with the woman's profession, it's with willingness to fuck a married guy; and is just as shitty in a prostitute as in Michelle (who's shown to be supposedly a good person here).

Sorry, 2 stars. The WHOLE thing is bad. The main hero is a shithead who deserved to die for cheating, and proved it again when he almost fucked the ex-wife as an escort. The fact that he was tempted is damning, though props to not going through with it. The fact that his cheating drove the ex to become clearly mentally unstable, makes his fault worse. Instead of just desserts, he got a relatively minor temporary punishment (there's a big difference between being a victim of cheating and being a victim of revenge sex) and then got his undeserved happily ever after.

Michelle... well, I'm not too happy about HER happily ever after, as she had sex with a married guy. Nowhere near as bad as cheating on a spouse but still, a good person she's not.

A story I'd have rated at 5 stars, would have had the dude cheating on Melissa, and her destroying him in retaliation. Not the sappy undeserved happy ending for both of them.

How did Michelle turn into Melissa ?

Good story, well done.

Another good finish 5*

1* for a very fucking sad story. Yep - just what I was looking for - sad fucking shit.

Redemption fully.

5/5

More of a believable reality. Both cheated.

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Fun und interesting!

11/10!!!!!

Great Story!! I loved it!!

Michelle he went with the woman who fucked up his life geee i wonder if he set it up right from the start he is an idiot

Great story

The asshole deserved more pain! He gets to fuck and try to portray himself as a good guy???

Boring

zero, who is Melissa?

I'm usually all for burning, but this story rubbed me the wrong way.

While it was an ending, it was an ending that destroyed a woman because, in all your stories, women deserve pain and suffering.

I don’t know why you hate women, I really don’t but you need professional help.

ZEROZEROZERO...

WHO THE HELL IS MELISSA?

Is it Melissa or Michelle?

You sir, are one of the best. Keep doing what you do! 5 stars

Nice ending but what's her name; Michelle or Melissa? You change half way through.

In most cases of revenge-cheating, both people lose. The original story was disturbing and the followup more so in a crash-and-burn style. It is still a BTB in a measurable sense, but not as extreme as it could have been.

Great save FTDS!!!

Michelle, or is it Melissa, make your mind up, poor editing spoilt this story

You did a great job finishing the story with a great ending. Well done 5 stars

cheating is an awful contagious disease.

i resisted the first time....the second time. the third time? i was infected. i was hurt and angry at the world.

i decided 'cheating is just the norm. if i can't beat em'...join em'' so i cheated. i cheated on bad people. i cheated on good people. but i stopped caring. at first i had revenge fantasies about pay back cheating, but i was too forgiving. i should have left, but i didn't. as a result....their illness festered inside me. turned me into a terrible person that cheated...not outta anger...but outta indifference. it was worse.

it took me cheating on a good person to realize i was perpetuating a sickness. i confessed. i took hell for it. but it stopped the sickness in me. hopefully i didn't infect anyone too much. i will never do it again though...because it's not who i was in the past. past me wasn't sick. past me didn't infect others.

if someone cheats on you, or you cheat on them....do the right thing....end the sickness.

SAd story. I actually didn't like it. As Ted said, he started it all, but he should have left as he should have apologized to Lexi and let Lexi have closure. It was his fault and it got out of hand. Ted should have done more, yes divorce but should have followed up on Lexi after she got out, probably paid for Lexi's therapy and a little alimony/allowance while she recovers herself and made sure to take Maria out of her life. Yes, Ted is a failure and I'm glad he has bouts of guilt throughout his life.

But it was well written as usual by FTDS so I give this a 4 star even if I didn't like it.

Knowin' you're from west by-gawwwd Texas, I heard the voice, and I swear, that run-down motel was on old highway 80! Great flow, and a perfect way to end this stinker of a story. You're kind of like the Paul Harvey of Literotica: "And, now...for the rest of the story!"

Good writing. The story is over the top, like many stories in the genre.

I got a kick out of reading the comments. People act like the story was real, or should be realistic. Real life is mundane, which is why I read these stories. I wonder if the commenters think that porn accurately reflects real sex.

Thanks for sharing your ending of this story.

Way over the top as far as the wife is concerned.Could have been good, if it were pulled back a bit.

Again, another one where the payback is deserved, but not happy.

What the fuck happened to Michelle ???? Does he have two wives/women ??? O.K.,I guess. The Bear Is confused.

The BEAR

Everybody in this story is fucking nuts

Well done story about the devastation and wreckage this kind of escalation leaves behind. Two absurdly selfish individuals destroying the remnants of a marriage with the equivalent of emotional napalm.

Two messed up people, both at fault. Lexi took it way too far. Why do the women in these LW stories always take the revenge to the extreme. Story would have been better with Marie getting messed up a little.

My first wife was indeed my soulmate. In a moment of weakness I cheated on her. One single time that lasted less than one hour. But she found out about it and she had zero tolerance for cheating. She would be proud of the faithful man her ex-husband became. But kharma is sick. I have been rewarded for my one moment of infidelity with a string of cheaters. Story here?

It really is best to leave the ex alone like radioactive waste. Well she wasnt very amenable to any sort of reconciliation, she went...fractal. It was good for an alternative ending add-on, but was a little shallow for a story. I would rather see the cheater and their cohort happy and the cheated happy with someone else over reconciliation. It's not likely, but I don't think reconciliation is very worthy either.

Just as bad as the original!

"As my research has taught me" An interesting way for the last anon to admit he has to pay for sex a lot.

As my research has taught me a large number of women who are prostitutes have a permanent sexual relationship with another woman.

Seems there is some name confusion.

Who is Melissa and what happened to Michelle?

if Lexi has realized her mistake, broken off with Maria and lived a normal life. In my opinion.

Or if Maria had tried to intervene and get them back together.

Everyone is a sick bastard in this dreary hellhole of a story.

And these disgusting drinkers are the bane of any sensible, healthy relationship. Please, all of you alkies, just croak already, would you? You're all worthless, and make horrible protagonists, too.

That said - I hated the ending. He should have folded his tent, taken his playing cards and left the area. No way he goes back to Michelle. Too much water over the bridge. Add to that the fact that her daddy is wealthy and you have the recipe for a disaster. Divorce Lexi for sure. Go back to Michelle? No way in hell.

First off, I rated this deservedly 5-stars. Now, the point I am about to make is pointed at the majority of writers...NOT JUST YOU. Melissa suddenly became interchangeable with another character. 90% of authors will list the husband/victim in the first three paragraphs and his name never appears again. In all the conversations and narrative, somehow his name is never mentioned. It is as if he is of no importance. Sometimes the wife's name is erroneously given as another lesser character of the story. Hint: Keep a little notepad with all of the characters and a short description of their status in your story. Make an effort to include the storyteller's name in conversations throughout your story, but especially on the last page. Thank you for letting me rant to all writers.

i want a scorched earth ending.

Because after catching my own wife and divorcing her, I actually saw her and began to have interaction with her sixteen years later. Jana cheated, I caught and divorced her, then moved away from our hometown. It was my of my coworkers she cheated on me with and I couldn't bear to continue working with him. Yes, I gave him an ass-beating and did a little time in jail for it, but afterward I left.

Sixteen years later, after having zero contact with my wife, I was remarried, children and had to move back. A promotion had me working as a senior VP with my original employer.

By then I was remarried to the girl-next-door type of girl. Katie was the opposite of my first wife, tall, athletic, pretty not beautiful and is truly the love of my life. We met a year after my move, went out for a year before I proposed, then another six months of planning before our marriage. Four years later, we had twin boys and I learned about what it took to be a man with a family that depended on me.

My first wife had been going to college in order to teach. When we married, she decided to be a sit-at-home and fuck other men wife. Of course, I didn't know that until long after the fact. Yet when I returned to my former town, I found she had indeed returned to school and earned her teaching degree. Soon after, she began teaching fourth grade.

When we moved back our boys entered third grade. It didn't take long before I found out through the grapevine my wife was teaching. I, we didn't see her until my boys were playing soccer and Jana was there in the stands, correcting papers and watching the game. She looked older, much older than her years might have indicated.

When she saw my wife and I there, she came over and sat next to us. It was uncomfortable but we all made the best of it. We learned she had never remarried and knew immediately they were my boys, the spitting image of pictures she had seen of me when I was young.

She never said she was sorry for our past, she had already done that during the divorce process. I found out she still lived in our original tiny house and had been teaching for thirteen years and looked forward to having my own boys in her class.

I have to admit, it was gratifying to see her regret, they should have been our children. But I could not have been happier with my wife and new life.

"I'm turning into something really bad, Tony. Really bad! And I don't know what to do!" – Um, stop?

“It's not over until I say it's over!” – LOL, she can’t force him to stay married, especially when she refuses to act like a married woman.

Assuming all her sex has been unprotected, who knows what diseases she’s picked up?

Yes, he cheated, but as others have said, when the wives here cheat they tell their husbands, "It was just sex, it's YOU I love," and "Get over your fragile male ego"!

It would be nice if he texted like a grown man and not a teenage girl.

That much was obvious. But when he has the conversation with Michelle/Melissa and tells her he's "broken" I think she believes him (with some convincing from her Father) and never sees him again. Too much of a reach to have him end up happily married to Michelle/Melissa. Sorry - bad ending.

One thing I don't like about this is how the guy texts like a teenage girl.

The messages are short enough that short forms isn't needed.

FTDS may have done his best to bring this joke of a LW tale to its sorry end; but I

marvel at how such a storyline could have been thought out at all. The bitch of a slut wife should have been hung up to dry but the husband limped out instead. 3* for FTDS' lame effort and 1* for using up space?

Michelle? Melissa?

No wimp here. He left her after enough bad. Good for him. Thanks, I was starting to wonder about the authors here.

Well balanced tale.

@krossis666 - he tossed a bunker buster into his married life. She tossed a pocket nuke. They both are scarred and will carry them forever. The husband unscathed? Not hardly.

I almost feel sorry for Lexi. She wasn't a cheater until he cheated. THEN she cheated too. HE was the catalyst, and in the process, he shattered Lexi's mind, with a lot of help from her man-hating 'friend'. In her hurt, and desire to 'get even', and lash out, she destroyed herself instead! I doubt she would ever have become a whore, if her husband hadn't set her on her self-destructive path. She became bitter and hateful, as do many cheated upon spouses, only in this case, her friend was just as hateful and broken, so Lexi never moved past the hurt. Her whore friend wouldn't have let her. In the end, her 'revenge' destroyed her instead.

Like I said, I ALMOST feel sorry for her, but she was still well capable of recognizing that she was only hurting herself, and COULD have put a stop to it, but chose not to. She should have just walked away and started over, when she discovered his cheating, instead of trying to hold onto her marriage, while also feeding her need for payback. That's why trying to stay married after infidelity never works. The need to get back is always there, and either you do, and still lose, or you don't, and end up unhappy and resentful anyway. When someone cheats, it's over. Move on and start over, it's the best way in the end, despite what all the do gooders say. Staying just for the sake of it only serves to remind you on a daily basis of the betrayal. Everything else is just lying to yourself.

In the end, as in reality, the cheater that caused the problem walked away unscathed, and won out in the end. He deserved a life as unhappy as Lexi's, but instead got a do-over.

Hey, FTDS, you sure got a bunch of flak for inserting a wrong name. What the hell? They're not critics, they're arseluks. Good writing and tale. Enjoyed it. Lucked out with Michelle, didn't he? Cheers!

That is a special diagnostic term used in the medical community -

But it fits well here - LOL

No idea why someone would run off the deep end that badly and that consistent;y while denying the reality so vehemently and not be essentially a fruitcake -

It made for very unrealistic and ultimately unsatisfying story since we have no frigging clue what or why in the end - for either of them really.

Or vice versa? At least you put an ending to it. But I was surprised when he didn't set Lexi up again in Chicago to get busted. And for that matter he let Maria get away scoot free. Not your typical ending for an FTDS story. Somehow this seemed a little off. I don't see Michelle/Melissa taking him back, let alone allowing him to move in with her before he had even started the divorce. Anywho - thanks for the story. Keep after it since god knows there are hundreds of unfinished stories out there.

I'm sick and tired of seeing the female win when she cheats. The fact she is still a whore makes it better. And to ask you feminist out there that read this I have two writers for ya "suck it!"

What is your problem with this story,it makes perfect sense, the only problem is forgetting Michelle's name and calling her Melissa!

And as another commenter said, it seems almost every LW story has a cheating wife who wants her husband to "just get past it", yet here we get the usual cheated-on wife response, Burn The Bastard!

Is Melissa? Or did you mean Michelle? Pretty sloppy shit considering she supposed to be the love of your protagonist's life.

there is always some kind of taxes involved. TK U MLJ LV NV

He was a cheater too, just like the whore, Lexi. Neither deserved any kind of happiness in their lives. The only way this could have had a good ending, is if the two worthless scum were stuck with each other for the rest of their lives, hating each other.

Cheaters don't deserve any kind of happy ending!

Melissa, Michelle, Come on - you are a great writer, how did this slip by?????

FTDS, The ending you provided is too practical. It can not be that way, cause love is accepting people can't get away from their past this much easily. And people tend to forgive their loved ones, no matter what they had done... Your other stories are good but this one got not that much potential end. Some questions remained like how the lost puppy of a husband became a man all of a sudden? And all!

P.S. Can you write an ending for devil's mistress?

There is no doubt about that. I subcontracted for a woman for a woman named Lexi. One day my wife and I stopped by her house to pick up a paycheck. She is in her 50's, dressed in short shorts, and her top gaped open at the top showing her big bra-less boobs flopping around. Won't ever get the image of the nice, church-going lady out of my head, considering what she terminated me for. (Sorry, just had to get that off my chest! LOL)

You have different endings but this one served this story best. And it was probably the only reasonable solution. 5 stars as usual.

I don't understand why people think they are solving anything by going out and having revenge sex.

Keep track of your characters.

very well done. I wish there hadn't been so significant a shift away from the wife.

I personally thought that FTDS only believed in total destruction. As usual one wonders what would happen if the shoe were on the other foot?

Great conclusion to a sad situation. Instead of revenge fuck she should have just divorced the prick. Revenge sex doesn't work and she went nuts. He moved on to a happy life and she became a whore like her friend.

He didn't deserve to a happy and she didn't deserve her lot in life. Although it works in this tale in real life this ends with all involved alone.

Five Stars.

I'm curious to see if you can write a story, about Lexi, from her point of view after her divorce.

FTDS - ya done gud!

Went back and read the originals. Came back and read this.

Not a bad ending and it does wrap it up.

Bow and all.

Thx.

Not easy to fix it.Lexi going off the deep end is not explained,and there is no resolution between lexi and him.Why does Lexi become a,whore? Why does she show up 20 years later out of the blue?Not up to ftds normal standards,it leaves too much out.

Your addition to the story makes it complete.Nice touch about the ball game at the end. Thanks.

...plus, i like that FTDS is NOT stuck in just one thought pattern.

It appears to me that he can be the worst BTB ...if called for... through to reconciliation. I am BTB, but I do appreciate his response to the situation that other authors leave their protagonists in.

Well done, and thanks for your continuing contributions. You are doing more than most... you are tying up loose ends (and yes, that's loose, not lose).

I have read a bunch of stories. I have read stories that were impossible to understand. FTDS may may have a few small issues. He does this for free. I understand what he writes. I read what he intends. I appreciate that he writes quickly. I like that he cranks out stories. I catch all the tiny errors. If he went back to find all the piddly errors I would have to wait another week or so for the next story. I smile sometimes when I can see that he must have rewritten a section 4 or 5 times before he got what he wanted. It's readable. He gets 5***** from me. I want him to write more. If you need to pick on small stuff maybe you should offer to edit.

Thanks for the stories.

Why the fuss

So she turns tricks for a living , some life.no husband no children . Getting old with a bunch of tricks. He was a jerk letting his dick do his thinking. But her reaction was over the top , she just should have divorced him. He straighten out and she went down the tubes. A paid whore. So do we really need a part two.?? He has two kids and a family unless you give us her story there is no reason for a part 2!

Fuck, you can't even get the name right! and you NEED to FINISHTHEDAMNSTORY! it's not finished, you left more unfinished than the original writer did.

a waste of time.

where I thought the original was headed.

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I can't quite give it a 5, cause as others here said, there seems to be more to be resolved, namely what is Lexi doing at the game? Want him back after twenty years? Willing to share with Michelle(not Melissa, never seen you make that mistake before_, like some stories do? Just there to stir up more crap? Some type of blackmail? What? I think FTDS needs to FTDS. It was a well written, nice plotline story though, unlike some say. It's just I believe you need to follow your own advice and finish it. Keep em coming though. Can't wait for Party of Five!

" I was still hurt that she'd never once tried to call, to apologize, to even discuss anything. Not even a letter or a message through her lawyer. " Without this, there is no story.

What the he'll happened, FTDS ?? You did NOT end this story.

You wrote a decent 3* chapter. A bit shallow on the character's backstory, especially Michelle or Melissa.

You set it up for another chapter FTDS.

Looks like the writer had himself a " senior moment" lol. I understand completely.

Will someone out there finish this damn story!

AMerryMan

Don't know what Anony Mous is bitchin' about. At least you finished what some dick wad quit on. Not too bad a finish. There's been a lot worse. Cheers!

This one doesn't feel all the way finished, to me. Ex-Wifey showing up at the softball game at the end could go several different ways. She could be there to make peace, maybe? Or, more likely from how she acted all throughout the original and this continuation, she could be plotting even more revenge. After all, seeing Hubby married with kids and happy with her archenemy might just push Ex-Wifey over the edge again. It's up to you, FTDS, but this one could use a resolution to that plot point, IMO.

Hubby kind of redeemed himself after what he did in the first tale, but he still wasn't very likeable. Ex-Wifey, on the other hand, was NEVER likeable. I know you had no control over what the original author wrote, but she should have just filed for Divorce at the beginning. Taking all of that into account, along with Best Friend Bitch egging her on, this tale was the only logical conclusion to the original. Just another case of how revenge fucks don't work.

5 Solid Stars. I hope you do write a resolution to Ex-Wifey showing up at Daughter's game, though.