All Comments on 'Raw Mommy'

I can't help but feel that this isn't a story, you have set the scene now what happens?

It IS a scene. It's not a part of a story - there is nothing to tell. That's how it starts and ends, and I like to leave out the commonplace.

I mean, I know what happened to her, but her son doesn't and never will.

Or just part of a story.

There surely is more to tell than just this little part.

This is nothing. There is no story. Poorly written. It could have been a good story taken further.

@ digdaddyrich

Flash scene this is. That was the point.

@ previous Anonymous

If it's poorly written, then it wouldn't make a good piece if it was longer either. If this is the case, good thing I stopped when I did! As for the story, indeed, there is almost none, because it is fetish pornography.

well i thought it was pretty good story leaves alot to the imagination. which sometimes is the best kinda story

Why the hell did you bother writing this crap?

Ok, so it is chapter one, you ever going to finish it???????????

I came back home after drinking with friends....

I saw her on the coffee table, gagged and blindfolded...

So I used her, the roughest I could, vagina and anus.

Then I left home

She will never know.

And every time I find her vulnerable I will use her.

Lets hope chapter 2 is better

I liked what there was of it have you ever considered finishing one.

very intense and powerful writing

intriguing & engaging concept

shocking in its delivery.

is it a story ?

is it half of a story ?

is it only the start of a story ?

tales like this that leave you with more questions than answers are like those annoying tunes that once you hear them, they rattle around in your head & you find yourself whistling or singing to them unexpectedly throughout the day.

with these type of tales hours later ,

you find yourself distracted by them at odd moments when you least expect it

you find yourself waking up in a cold sweat in the middle of the night with vague memorys of the disturbing story . .

Liked the first chapter (if you do plan on continuing). Maybe next, you could do the mom's perspective? She could possibly remember getting raped. Or make a similar story in which the mom was drugged. Maybe she gets used by a gang, then her son comes home and takes advantage of his drugged and chained mother?

And what now??

Great story - would love to see more

That was the most unimpressive story ever!!!

andromon seems to have written this flash scene raw! The images were popping in his had & he was recording them in his hand-held device. He fid not embellish anything, the story is RAW.

What happens next? Each of has to use his/her own imagination.

This story does not try to hide anything about its subject, that's why i like it: mom's BDSM date went wrong; her voyeur son is there to help her!

I wish I was there to smell her too! Good storytelling.

Ever find who fucked her and shoot cum all ofher

I hated this story and gave it one star

Really needs an editor as if that would even help! Also, from the narrative, the the kid is dumber than a dirt clod . . . .