by strtlr69
There is no hierarchy btwn different variants of English. Period.
I love the comment by anon 07/01/19 (kloves it, his cup of tea: πππππ (5)!... finds it very very erotic.)
In my book it is a bhabhi's unalienable right & her sacred duty to guide her devar thru the trials & tribulations he faces in his youth life. It is OK if they French kiss & dry hump in the process.
It isn't cheating if a husband willingly shares his wife with his single brother!
It isn't cheating if a wife willingly shares her husband with her single sister!
My wife is 10 year older than my brother. My brother was a late bloomer. When he was 18, a girl told him that he did not know how to French kiss. It ruined his self esteem. He was visibly upset. My wife told him, "... don't worry, I'll teach you how to French kiss tomorrow at the beach... if that's OK with your brother." Then she hugged me, French-kissed me, & said: "i want you to watch us..." I replied, "Yes, teacher!"
Next morning the 3 of us found a secluded spot on the beach. My wife wore her skimpiest bikini! She did teach him how to French kiss... & how to "gently pet a girls love handles".
(You got the picture...)
The following excerpt from this story is PRICELESS (the loving wife's husband explains to her lover why he willingly shares her):
"... I love her in a weird way. I think you will understand it later in life. I am jealous of you having her all by yourself but I love it too. Just look at her - she looks so satisfied, she looks so horny, she looks so slutty, she looks so divine. I can do anything for such happiness of hers."
I envy Rahul more thani envy Rakesh!
I wish i were Priyanka's husband.
Dear story teller, it is torturing. You are torturing our cock to make hard by your narration. What a narration, really i had to masturbate after reading this.
I am also fantasising my wife for such an affair.
FANTABULOUS, KEEP OUR COCKS HARD BY SIMILAR STORIES
This is a wife sex story. It would not be much different if its storyline were taking place in Ireland or New York or British Columbia.
Whereas i don't like the word slut, Priyanka is a slut. Period. There are sluts in all parts of the world. Our maker made them for a reason!
The point of those stories is that wife has sex with other men yet still loves her husband, albeit in a perverted way.
In Indian culture this story is particularly hot because bhabhi-devar illicit sex is a frequent theme. (bhabhi is brother's wife; devar is husband's younger brother).
The idea is outright brilliant:
WHILE YOUR OLDER BROTHER WORKS LONG HOURS, YOU BANG HIS WIFE.
BOTH YOU & HIS WIFE GET MORE OUT OF LIFE!
YOUR OLDER BROTHER BENEFITS TOO:
HIS WIFE IS NITHER MISERABLE NOR DEPRESSED WHEN HE COMES HOME.
Indian English is NOT INFERIOR to its American counterpart, it is DIFFERENT.
India has a number of official &/or recognized languages. Hindi is the language of communication in central government, military, railways, post-secondary education etc. In southern states in India, English is used in lieu of Hindi when possible.
Official langage of Pakistan is Urdu. I was told that colloquial versions of Urdu & Hindi are similar to one another.
Those who don't like such stories are actually protesting about women being free with their sexuality. Priyanka is entitled to all the pounding she wants. If it from a hunky brother in law, makes all the more fun. Keep going and keep pounding.
The feedbacks are positive at least.
Thanks rihana, sultrysona, iamahotgal,taco, ankur and the anonymous guy/girl.
@imahotgal - doublepenetration - let's see if inspiration happens for that.
@anonymous - who hates the delays... can't help it buddy - real life gets the better of me. feedbacks don't inspire to write faster. update to the house or whore story - lacking inspiration to write further.
thanks dear for his long awaited update. i love the way you describe the thoughts of characters . Your stories supply both elements the erotica and the beauty. with such a challenging theme u have really crafted it so impressive filled with lust and excitement. Though a conversation between hubby-wife where hubby got agreed to be a cuck could have added to the spice. keep writing and entertaining whole readers. thanks. hindi_roleplayer_m26 @ yahoo
ur stories are nice to read the way you leave it incomplete makes me get pissed at you. House wife or a whore was left incomplete. Priyanka the slut every episode takes over 4 months to come out. way you describe is good but the delay you make is annoying. im sure you can do it well. still waiting for housewife or whore next episode.
This is getting better and better. I am waiting for the next episode. Will you have a double penetration scene?
Amazing writing, well done author. To sum it up, Loved it :) Keep going ;)
Let the ratings decide - whether I should continue or not
Until then - peaceeeeeeee
To @Anonymous...I'm not from India, I don't know how to write in Indian native language...And I think you aren't a good writer or even a good reader...You just rate 5* to all stories without read them...I never comment comments, unless they refer me...
To @strtlr69...You didn't read my comment in the right way...I'm not Indian so this story doesn't disturb me...I just posted a comment done by an Indian in another story like this one...I know he insults the writer, maybe because he felt himself insulted...I never insult a writer...As you say the writer has the right to write what he likes, and the reader the right to like or not what was written...But I also can understand the point of view of this Indian, everyday assaulted by stories degrading Indian men and women...That's why I think this kind of stories should be written in the native language of India...I hope you understood why I posted his comment...
Regardless of the obvious language issues this story is so cliche that it's laughable. Is there an Asian story where the husband is not a willing cuckold? Just cliche and not erotic at that
Okay, some of the wording was awkward. An editor could fix that. But we know what you're trying to say, even when it's not perfectly proper American English.
But the story itselft? Sooooooo HOT! That overrides any of the language problems.
As one whose husband loves to watch me fuck his brother, this story reignites my lust for my younger, taller, bigger (and I do mean BIGGER), handsomer brother-in-law. I am dripping with need, right now, and no man to take care of me! Sigh...
Now I have to read your other stories...
I don't know about the positive comments but I do know where the negative ones are coming from.
Thanks a lot impo_61
And if one would look at the positive comments closely, you can note the similarities between them and the author's comments. And I noticed how they appeared so close to each, almost like they were posted by the same person..
So you are so low that you have to write positive comments by yourself???
Keep your sick paki shit in your own mind.
Anyone can write similar crap, it is no great achievement.
1 - 5 star from my side
2 - Author asked impo to make an attempt to write and then his views might change
3- I don't see any problem in his language skills here. It is more do with your insecurities i believe.
You can't write for shit in English. Try writing in a language you actually know something about. You just keep posting this crap everyone hates. Maybe your countrymen would enjoy this in their own language.
Try writing one story on your own and your views might change.
Everyone is entitled to one's view (kinks too). i respect your views and ratings.
This isn't my comment...But the comment of an Indian native put in one of these Indian stories:
βI have one thing to say to you. Go fuck yourself. Maybe less than 1% of these horrible stories are written by actual Indians becoz - hey sickos exist everywhere. Most of these are written by Pakis or some other hateful fucks who have nothing better to do than to write this crap.β 1*