All Comments on 'The Last Day'

Please take this into a meeting later in there lives

Quick and straightforward. Keep writing. A phrase I've never heard before: "...a non-forgetful night." Sort of means the same as unforgettable, but makes the reader stop and ponder. Not what you're going for.

Many comma errors and the word is "afterwards" not "after words"

Good story, but you really need an editor.