by 1965Squash
Great story but you need to do what the TV folks do and make the ending a dream with the worst case some more broken bones!
But for dreams of foolish old men. Its true, there is no fool like an old fool.
Seems like another nightmarish dream. Similar to the one less detailed in pt. 3 only the guy is the one killed in this one instead of her. If you want to continue this story that is what I'd do. Otherwise some things don't make sense.
Nicely done, You worked the process and spun it back to the title at the last minute. Good job.
I just discovered your series and really liked it. Up until this part 4. No way can he be dead ! Please fix this.