by Bambivelvethooter
Waste of time to read this story. Not very erotic, and no reason for the caning
I loved everything, i see a number of commenters who didnt approve of the face slapping but i absolutely loved it. It added more dominance to the scene. As long as it was all consensual i dont see a problem in it. I loved your writing bte. CONGRATULATIONS!
It was unnecessary and unpleasant. The BDSM aspects were all right but that took the story over the abuse line for me. You write well but I can only give you three stars for the writing as the subject was not to my taste. Keep on writing -- you do it well but ...
Face slap was a no-go for me, also. I spent the rest of the story angry. You did well establishing that she likes it rough, but that caning sounded damaging. A for writing, C- for content.
think. . . .detached retina, fractured cheekbone, need I go on?