All Comments on 'The Pride of a Slave Ch. 05'

Please come back! We miss you!

this story is so good. i just hope you get back to letting her powers come out. I like seeing her help them deal with one another. They aren't doing much of dealing with each other. The boys have both been busy seperately. I hope we see more of that. I still wonder who knows about her. I am sure those who do (the art teacher for instance) will want something out of her or hurt her. So, I am surprised that Victor didn't put out a stipulation that she be protected if not with the boys or something. It is clear these three could shake up the world as they know it. I would be disappointed if the point of the story is that she will be the advisor/mistress for these two. I think they are meant to share her but I hope it is in a way that can change their shitty society. I'm not sure where you will go with this from here, but I am anxious to see. I am anxiously awaiting the next chapter!

Can't wait for you to come back and write more. I agree with many of the comments already posted. I will be none to happy if her only role is to be mistress to both of them. She deserves better but I want her to be with them both. I must say I am not a fan of the Art teacher. I think he is out to hurt her. And I want to know what the Fathers intentions are. I can see many ways you could take this story and can not wait to see which way you do go. Would love to have an update on where you are at but am patiently waiting for your return to writing. :)

Please write more I just can't get enough of this story!!

I love this...you must write more!

I'm dying here it's been forever!! I need to know what happens!!!! Love it!!

you must write more it still has my undivided attention plus i really want to know more bout Sera powers......hmmm i highly doubt d 3 of dem cld end up together wats goin on wit their relationship?????

I often come back to this story looking for the next chapter. All I can say is I hope everything is ok in life and that you get to finish this chapter.

Please come back soon with an update. I know life can get crazy, but I hope to one day soon finding out what Di will think about having to still share. I also love how she has both parents thinking the world of her. I also am looking forward to finding out what the king finds out about the art teacher...I think he maybe knows about her powers or thinks he knows. Either way, he is acting like a sleezy jerk and to a student at that.

I hope you have a great and productive day :)

Love this story!! Please update soon!!

This is an incredibly intriguing view on werewolves and vampires especially considering your other story, it Is quite amazing, i commend you. Though i hope sera doesn't allow her new relationships to impact too heavily on her school work after shes worked so hard for it! Please keep writing this interesting tale! And i dare say those three are going to have to have a chat soon...

astricti

I'm loving this story very much. I hope that you update soon. This is the kind of story that I can't stop reading once I start. Was up till 4 AM reading it. lol.

give me more please!(: love!

An update please! Breathlessly waiting for more.

~hz

Wonder why writers here don't follow through and complete the stories

I am LOVING this story. I can't wait for more. You definitely need to try to get this published. I am addicted. I have to say, I want to see her pregnant by both princes at once. Maybe even more than two babies. And of course that would put her in serious danger, bringing about many more unexpected twists and turns and dragging this story out as long as possible until she hits her 21st bday and we have even more awesomeness to read about :) regardless, keep it up as long as you can. I hate it when I find a story I REALLY like and POOF all of a sudden its done.

I love this stories please update need to find out want happens with sera.

good stuff you leave us hanging. That is so unfair. I hope that you will be adding more to both of your stories. I really want to know what happens to Sera.

i first read your story 4 months ago and iv been checking back often to see if there is a new chapter yet! Please update it soon!! I love this story!!

On the ipad looking for chapter 6 hope all is well. Thanks for you do.

this story is too good to stop now ! Every day I look too see if you posted another chapter please continue writing your writing is refreshing I've read your first story and enjoyed it. Now I'm addicted to Poas and i need another fix please write another chapter.

I would sooooo pay money for this story. I love everything about it and it has serious best seller potential. LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT!!!!!!!! I'll be patiantly waiting for the next chapter :0)

I'm like the others. I love this story. You kinda dropped off the map on us here. If you're unable to post a story as quickly as you had the others can you at least give us maybe a little update on your profile bio? I'd love to at least know that there's hope of a continuation. Otherwise I might lose my mind a little bit here XD

i do hope this story gets a definite resolution unlike the first one...i get that you'd like the ending to be up to the reader but for me personally, i'd rather have a completely finished story to read and not be left hanging with questions...whether it be a happy ending or not is up to YOU and i'd like to read a conclusive resolution

I keep checking back for the next chapter. Please post more or at least let us know what is going on in your bio section.

Thanks.

I love this story. It's one of the best on the sight and I was wondering, where are the other three chapters you and your editor were working on?!?! This story is really entertaining please don't be one of those authors who never finish their stories.

Sincerely,

A Di-hard fan

I like this story. Now she slept with both of them and will gladly becomes their mistress/whore. I just want her make up her mind and be with just one at a time. She is human but act like an animal in heat, any cock (of those two) will do. This is not the kind of the leading woman roll for me or story line.Thanks God I just briefly reading through the story now I will read no more. To bad you are a good writer.

I agree with the Where are the other three chapters? comment, you can't leave it there!

Love it stories can't wait to see if there more to come

I've been enjoying "The Pride of a Slave" immensely, and hope that whatever has caused you to cease posting is not permanent.

As others have commented, your command of English grammar is weak, but that can be overcome. I'm not saying you should drop your current editor if he or she is helping you flesh out your tales, but as they stand they do need further correction from someone with a greater command of English--who is, in particular, able to recognize and correct a run-on sentence.

But: much more importantly, you are a natural story teller; you bring your characters to life and cause us, your readers, to root for them, or revile them, or whatever... And that is the most important factor in writing fiction.

Here's hoping that you will soon be in a position to start posting again (*please* let us know how you're fixed) and that you will not succumb to The Curse Of Literotica--whereby so many of the best tales are, for one reason or another, abandoned unfinished.

Regardless, thanks for the enjoyment you have already provided.

--PJB(UK)

I keep coming back and checking for the lasted installment. What happening? I hope you finish this for us, becauae i am very curiois about where it will lead.

What if she have two one vampire and one wolf....dont leave me hanging!

YOU NEED TO COME BACK AND FINISH THIS STORY!!! pretty please it is too good to let it go to waste please come and finish it!!!!!

Please please please finish I'm constantly checking on this and I feel like it's a book I would read hundreds of chapters of it I'm in love with this story please continue it :-D PLEASE!!!!!!!

Please write more, I love this story!

This is the best story I have read on this site, or any other site for that matter. Please gimme more!

Please give us another chapter. I am in love with this story and keep checking for an update everyday or two. I really like how both Princes' thoughts are on keeping her with them even though they know they cannot marry her. Please let us know how this workers out for them. Will they be together as an threesome or will she be with just one or either of them? And what about her powers that will come into full "bloom" when she is 21? There is too many questions left unanswered. Please give us our "fix" :)

You need to come back and finish this amazing story! It's too good to give up on.

I saw the new comments, but have already consigned this to the wasteland of unfinished masterpieces that currently inhabits this site.

I concur with the others. If you have more, tell us about it please. This is a fantastic story, better than many books i've read. I love a good love story.

great job it feel like there more to come

Just saying that I'm hoping you will at the least put out those chapters before you end your hiatus :) you are a very skilled storyteller and I am lucky to have stumbled upon you - just wishing that you'll continue here on literotica :)

i see a 3some in this story's future... please? such good friends that love sera so much... enough to please her together???? yummy!

The story is so good. The plot is getting so interesting. I noticed that you havent uploaded for a while, but please do. I would love to read more!!

Are you leaving the story as is? I hope not. I have read it twice now. I really hope you at least tie up the loose ends. Thanks for the story.

As so many others have commented, I am disappointed this this was never finished. It was incredibly emotional and engaging. I really hope you can and will continue This sometime.

I think you could at least finish the story.Its not really fair to your readers to get them started and then just leave them hanging.Its like being on the verge of a climax but never getting to finish,,just not fair,lolI wil start checking posting dates on all authors and stories from now on so as not to be dissapointed again,if its not regular,then its not worth starting.

I can't wait to read the rest of it !!!!

I haven't cried this much for the longest time. I suggest uploading the rest of your chapters or make this into a book before I go nutts!

Keep up the good work lovely face. >○<

Ok so, your characters are so interesting and intriguing. I love the build up of the story line and every single detail you've incorporated. I can't wait to see what happens next with these three and their relationship. I also want to find out more about Sera and what makes her so special. The path she's on is really a cool one, although the Art Professor is kind of creepy. I feel a twist coming on from that as well. Good luck writing and please don't leave this for too long. Syn'

Where is the rest this story is far from finished. Continue please.

Great story. Please continue the storyline.

Waiting for more. All the great stories take a little more time to produce but I am eagerly waiting to see how this plays out. I devour books and already have a couple of different ways this will play out in mind.

I see that this was posted quite a few months ago I hope you will keep writing I was really enjoying this.

More please

I love this I've read it 3 times now, still waiting for another update. Wish you would come grace us with another chapter... Will wait forever.... Need another chapter.............. Must... Have... An.... Ending....... ;-)

I know it's weird but it could be a cool story idea, There's a True story about a women who slept with her husband and lover in the same day and had two twin boys by both guys. This could be an interesting chapter to create if your suffering from writers block, this might be a potential great story to consider it and helping create a new race or breed of immortals: the human, vampires, and werewolves immortals and heres article

Google this: Texas woman gives birth to twins - from different fathers

The 11-month-old twin boys born to a Texas mom have a lot in common, but one thing they don't share is a father.

That's because their mother, Mia Washington, cheated on her partner, James Harrison, according to the Daily Mail and her fling resulted in a one-in-a-million double conception. The result is that one twin, Jordan, is James's son but the other one, Justin, was fathered by a man whose identity has not been released.

The Dallas mother became suspicious about her sons' paternity when she realized that their facial features were dissimilar, according to the Daily Mail. She visited Clear Diagnostics DNA Lab, had a paternity test and learned that there was just a 0.001 chance that the twins could have the same father.

Really good story. I hope you will continue writing, because I am eager to find out where you will take this. I am curious, like the person who commented before me, will there be a pregnancy/pregnancies? What role will the teacher play? Please don't leave us hanging.

I feel like this is a real book im reading the story is so great! But also like when I read a book I can't put it down till i've finished it. So PLEASE finish the story.

Hi I would love you to finish this story I want/ need to know what happens so please please please please post more

I Love the way the story is going. How perfect. Keep it up, I can't wait to read the next chapter.

We miss you! :)

Not much more to say. This WAS a great story. But unfinished works are a crime.

You must have your reasons since there was not a lack of encouragement. There have been longer gaps but I suspect you have dropped this for some personal reason. I hope you change your mind.

I have read the stories of Literotica for over 10 years and this is the only story I have ever commented on. I absolutely love this story. Keep up the good work and hurry with the next chapter

I'm begging you.. finish both stories.. Lilly's and Sera's... I know I, and many other of your faithful followers are dying for you to finish the story.. I don't know what's happened but I hope you are okay... I've checked your submissions every day since the first chapter of your first story.. you truly are an amazing writer and I would hate to think that you've given up on us. your stories are infinitely better than sopme of the smut on this site... please give us all some peace of mind...

please & thank you

xoxo

Finish this story! I absolutley love it!

You are killing me... Please put a new chapter up. You said that you were 3 ahead.... Please pretty please....... Have read this soo many times, one of the best.

Please finish it. Pleaseeeeeee

I absolutely love this story!! Please update soon. Waiting for the next chapter eagerly. Keep up the good work!

More please please pretty please

I must add my voice to the chorus of those begging for more. Can't wait to read more about Sera.

Love the idea of a love triangle that has at least a slim chance of success. Would like to see how this story progresses.

Please continue this story, it's so good and I would love to see where it goes and if Sera gets her happy ending.

Where are you?!

Your last chapter submitted in February?? It's December and we are all itching for the rest of this story!

Did the author die?

I hate when this happens ... start reading a wonderful and well written story only to have a long wait for the ending. If there ever is an ending. Sigh.

This was SO much better than your first story (which I still enjoyed). Your editor, though I'm sure making some corrections, misses a lot of simple errors, but I'm more than willing to over look those in exchange for the amazing plot and characters you have developed. I, like so many others, hate that this has not been continued for quite some time. Especially since you were "3 chapters ahead."

Hope all is well with you and you eventually pick this amazing story back up.

-onyx

You'd think an author who seems to have a fan base WAITING and ASKING what is happening that the author of this wonderful story could at least comment or update their bio, but that's too much to ask I guess.

One of the best stories I have ever read! I would love to hear more but I guess this is a good ending too. I do wonder how the future mates will take it and what that art teacher is really up to

Will there be anything added to this story in the future? I have read quite a few stories, and this has been one of my favorites.

Well... I guess this is the end since you haven't updated in a year. Kind of a bummer :(

If your not going to finish this story, can I finish it for you? I can already tell where you were going with this story and I hate to see such a great story go unfinished. Look at all the comments your getting with this story. HOW COULD YOU STOP? is it writers block? I can help with that. I've never had writters block in my life and I'm really good at help people get past a writters block. The only block I have is word block lol. I know what I want to say but can't remember the damn word i want to use.

Please can we have some more

I loved your other story but this one is just amazing! I keep hoping that Dimitri would get to marry her but it doesn't look like it... I am completely hooked on this story. I really hope you will come back and finish it (or let someone else continue, the storyline is to good to be left unfinished).

Loved loved loved it!

This is the best story ever unlike other authors u build up with emotion and not just jump straight to sex your amazing

Please god tell me that there is more of this story coming

I love the way you write, your characters and the tensions between the three main characters are so believable. Bravo. When will we see these other long- promised chapters hmm? Just when it was getting more interesting too....

- Marguerite

Oh my god i love the way you write you're amazing!! Please post thext chapter soon!! Can"t wait to see how this story unfolds :)

I was so excited to read this story but i`m guessing your done with this site. I really hope you post and tell us for sure but it has been almost a year, oh well. You are a great writter and I hope you come back one day.

Wow, I read all the chapters in one night they are wonderful. Is the rest coming?

This is a fantastic story! I want to read more. Please tell me you plan on writing more?

ello there sorry abt tht its just i read this awhileback but it only had 3 chapters i think and i lost u but now ifound you anyways please write more and u should publish it bc in a way its never been done so deliciously purrrrfect

StormHerald has gone the way of LittleIrishDolly, LittleChinaDolly, Greenly, Darkknight0307, and oh so many more. They start these amazing stories and just fuck off to wherever. Why bother with these stories if you never had any intention to finish them? It's authors like these that make me wary of getting involved in new literotica stories, unless they have already posted many of their intended chapters and the author is active in the comments section. Go to The Rebellious Slave if you are interested in a great story with an active author participation. StormHerald is never coming back...

I love your stories and really i hope that you will continue on with the pride of a slave... Also I know some change sites that they use or just continue on a different site. If that is the case id love to know where your may be posting more from yourself. But i again hope you continue this story.

I think you are a very talent writer! And I think that sera should make a choice between the 2 brothers and in my opinion it should be di, the vampire * they are perfect for a each other and his father must except it.... So please carry on writing!!!!

You are such a talented writer. Please come back and continue the story. I have so many questions- Will Sera get pregnant? What's the art teacher's motives? Will Delilah return? PLEASE CONTINUE!

More!! What happens next??

I want Sera to stay with both princes. i would be disappointed if they cant work our a way to share her. this story has the potential to be very long of it eventually deals with the slavery/cast system. most likely Sera and her abilities will assist with this. i hope that the story doesn't go round in too many circles and there is less of a focus on a wedge between the princes and Sera. more a 'us against the world' sort of thing where they are able to lead the society to a brighter future.

Where is the rest? it's been over a year, I hope that wasn't supposed to be the end?!

This is an amazing story and you are an extremely talented writer, when Sera's mother died you had me tearing up a lot, not many writers can do that to me. I like the idea of Sera being with both males and maybe working out a way for all of them to be happy with that but there seems to be a much stronger lovers connection between her and Di and he acts more loving with their changing relationship, it almost seems like Ryder just wants her because Di has her and doesn't pay much attention to her emotional needs or even her sexual ones, he's a bit selfish in my opinion and there hasn't been any mention of Sera being physically attracted to him like there is with Di. Please continue with this story, we all need to know the ending!

Please continue... The story is soooo interesting and I cant wait to read more. You are really an awesome writer, please dont stop writing. :)

please finish this story...so many questions left unsolved. please come back and write.