by Mixedwritings1993
Get an editor. I'm an English major and I had to quit reading before I was 500 words into this. The amount of errors here ... makes my eyes bleed.
I found the English as a Second Language, moderate grammatical errors style to actually be good. It added something to the story as a whole. The plot was great, too!
I found the way u wrote the story real cute and sexy at the same time. Ur English not being perfect made the story more stimulating. Maybe that's just me. Keep up the good work.
You are clearly not an English Speaking First kind of person. Fix that.