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Click here"More than okay, Carter. That was amazing." I give him a lazy satisfied grin. "Do you want to..." I motion to his gorgeous cock.
"Uhh," he looks embarrassed, "can we wait until tomorrow? It's getting late and I don't want your mom walking in on us again."
"Yeah, I guess today would look a little bit worse than yesterday, wouldn't it?" I wink at him, "plus it smells like sex in here."
After we get dressed, we cuddle on the couch, kissing and just enjoying each other's company, the tv playing something.
"Carter? Are you sure it was okay? I mean you wanted to stop before we..."
"Ally, it was amazing. I just know it would take awhile since I've already cum a few times and I don't want to get caught." Carter thinks for a second, then gets a wicked grin on his face, "I can tell you one thing though, if Greg gives better head than you then Paul's a lucky guy."
I giggle and give him a playful bite on the arm. "You'd better not ask him for a demonstration."
"Never. He's not really my type," Carter jokes giving me a quick kiss.
"Seriously, Carter. Are you okay with everything?"
"I have you, how could not be okay?" Then he thinks for a second, "Except for one thing. If I can find a way, would you like to go to the prom with me?"
*****
Okay, this is longer, has more story and hopefully there is just one part left to write.
- COMMENTS
Anonymousalmost 5 years ago"But what, I wonder, what? Paul's face is flushed as he" when she is with Carter....
C'mon...Things like this DESTROY good writing. Yours is generally good, but can be brought down by mistakes like this.
Anonymousalmost 6 years agoHello Janesaysit,
I just finished the four parts to this story and thourly enjoyed it. Excellent writing, grammar is good as is spelling, but there might be a couple of errors but I really don't care, as long as the story is well put together then I'm okay with it. The only critique I have is that just for grins and giggles I would have like to see a bit more to the fight between Ally and Megan. I think you could have used that scene to go over the top a little and it could have been funny. Its always nice to see people like Megan get their comeuppance. Might not be a politically correct thing to say, but then I'm not overly big on that stuff. Some you have to pay attention to, but since I've got a lot to say about it I'll spare you.
Back to the story. I liked Carter, but sometimes I thought he was a bit of a pussy, but then again, there was enough character there that it turned out just fine. I was a little surprised about Paul, but then I thought back to the way he was watching Ty's cock delving into Angel and realized that maybe he was more interested in cocks than pussies. And that was fine, but it kind of threw Ally a curve.
All in all an excellent story and I do hope you continue this series, at least get them settled in college and make sure it ends up a story book romance, but of course they'll have to have their ups and down.
Write on, McDuff, write on!
Ted (pooky12349@yahoo.com). This stupid system wouldn't let me log in.
scotlytover 6 years agoI hope there's more than one part left I want to hear all about college too.
Great job very interesting one of the best I've read
Anonymousabout 8 years agoYou certainly didn't write like a first timer. I love this story. Just one minor typo:
But what, I wonder, what? Paul's face is flushed as he and I straighten out our rumpled clothes. I think if should be Carter instead of Paul.
Please write more, you are talented.
Anonymousabout 8 years agoI have enjoyed all three chapters so far, but this is by far my favorite! Excellent characters, perfect amount of intrigue, and super erotic! Looking forward to reading more of your stories!
Anonymousabout 8 years agoThis is an excellent story. You should be doing this professionally.
redbaron172about 8 years agoGreat story, grammar.... I think they make too much of it here, this is free, the editors are volunteers... a few mistakes.... no big deal. Keep up the good work, story line is very good and the characters are realistic. Don't be too long in publishing the continuation.
Anonymousabout 8 years agoPlease please don't let it end with just one more chapter. This is really good. You could honestly have a full book if you put the effort!!!
