Note: You can change font size, font face, and turn on dark mode by clicking the "A" icon tab in the Story Info Box.
You can temporarily switch back to a Classic Literotica® experience during our ongoing public Beta testing. Please consider leaving feedback on issues you experience or suggest improvements.
Click here"Damn, Wesley. You are better than a woman." He said as he licks the cum off of his hand. They start dressing completely as they watch the fat bitch clumsily get off of the growling fox. "What are we going to do with this doll now, Cyn?" Ronnie asks as he looks at his youngest brother who is now broken on the bed.
"Ah, just leave his pansy ass. If he can't handle a little dick he is of no use to me now. Man, you guys were hot while you were raping his ass." She says as she pulls a tent sized dress on. "Grab, the little bitch. We are out of here. I'm no longer burning up so I must have conceived." Ronnie grabs Annie by the scruff of her neck and they head out to the van with Alex shouting at them from the bed.
"No! You cannot take my daughter away from me, you selfish bitch!" He continues to scream out as the hour passed on and the group of Beta's arrive to see the scene of their Alpha's heir crying madly on the bed next to a soon to turn Were fox next to him.
~~TBC~~
- COMMENTS
baikalisanalmost 10 years agoIt was hard to follow and jumped around too much with no warning.
I think with an editor and some serious polishing this could turn out to be a
Nice read
blkhrtalmost 10 years agoYour story NEEDS an editor. Sorry for being totally confused.
Anonymousalmost 10 years agoFuck me! That was appallingly painful to read. Don't post any more unless you have an editor with good grasp on the English language.
ariesgirlalmost 10 years agoSomewhat hard to understand the dialogue between the characters. Couldn't tell who was saying what.
I was disappointed Alex was kidnapped a second time. I'm guessing he didn't have anyone watching Cynthia and he should've had a guard or two with him when he went to change Annie's diaper.
Anonymousalmost 10 years agoThere were so many characters, I could not get the story very well, the rapes should have made the fox watching better and the story is mangled not at least by the changing of the tenses. You need to think this through much better. As reader I was not able to follow everything, sorry.
cittranalmost 10 years agoPlease, find yourself an editor who knows english well -- while I understood the general idea of what you were saying (most of the time), you kept switching tenses, had instances of incorrect (though similar-sounding) words, and the flow of your sentences made it difficult to read.
I do not fault your story at all, but the ability to communicate it clearly to your readers is an area that you appear to need help in.
Please, do not let your readership suffer because of a communication barrier -- even if it takes longer to get your story finished, the end result will be well worth it.
