All Comments on 'For the Greater Good: Continued'

You are a terrific writer. This is as well written as anything I've ever read. I don't always like your stories, but I have to admit that you are as good a writer as there is around.

I read this story and it got to me. I was angry and sad and happy. That's the mark of good writing. You got me totally immersed in the story. At first, I hated Ashley and thought Kurt was a major wimp. As I read that began to change. I still hated what she did, but Tom was alive and he could have been dead. She saved his brother, even it the way she did it was awful. She realized her mistake and tried to fix it. She was "odd." That's what set this apart. I have no idea how people that smart think. Maybe she could justify it in her own mind. I couldn't, but it was an amazing story and I'm in awe of your writing skills. RP

Great writing. Definitely got the blood flowing. Don't care much for the cheating, but I see what you were trying to do. There's just no way to justify cheating. This is as good a job as I've ever seen of it, but in the end, it's a fail. Great story though. I'll give it a five. Better than anything else for the last week.

...but doesn't actually answer the fundamental question: "Why didn't I call you, then? The simple, ridiculous truth is, I didn't think of it. It just didn't occur to me." This seems utterly inconsistent with the OCD, hyper-detailed woman otherwise described. Four stars. Even with this important issue massaged but not resolved, it's a good story, well presented, with worthy characters.

1+ crappy story. Stupid reason. Stupid plot. "I need to cheat on my husband to solve a problem" give me a break. 1 star bullshit crap.

as I have seen on this site. I think you did a really good job of trying to work around characters that were already "fleshed out" when you got them. However, I don't think that it would have been possible for me to stay with Ashley after what she did. And there would be some really deep conversations with other members of the team who contributed to unblocking his wife. Bad enough that she forgot all about his existence while she was away, but she really thought that he would be fine with all of that because of the what the project was. To be relegated to the position of "that guy over there" during all of this and her fucking her co-worker is something that should have taken him longer to get over. After all of that and the way they treated him like a mushroom he gets the manipulation machine turned loose on him by people who think they are so much smarter than him that he will buy their bullshit no matter what. And the worst one of them all was his wife. When you marry someone you are married to them all of the time, not just when they are around or when you get a few minutes with nothing important to think about. As I said, very well written but hard to swallow. And if his family would have turned their backs on him for divorcing a cheater, even if it was supposedly for the greater good, then to Hell with them too.

Sorry - didn't work. Crap reason, crap solution, very unbelievable.

She is supposed to be a genius, maybe she is but her arguments are filled with holes, foolish and worst - insulting:

"The choice I made between Tom's life and staying faithful" - Lie, she could have told him what she needed, let her husband fuck her, let him share in the glory for saving Tom's life.

"The truth is also that I will never again have sex with anyone else unless we both agree to it beforehand. " - Are these the words of a loving wife? Nope, these are the words of a slut wife. She is already considering the "next time".

She "loves" her husband - Lie, if she loved him as a husband, she would NEVER cheat on him. Love and cheating are at the opposite ends of the spectrum. Cheating is an act of contempt for the other spouse. It is an act that assumes that the other spouse is a fool that will not catch on, or disposable if they do catch on - or both. If she loved his family so much, she would never risk being kicked out of the family.

She counted on her husband staying with her because he loved her, she played on his love and abused it. It was a power move. It was not about a balanced partnership, it was about domination.

I don't know about anyone else but when someone's story is filled with inconsistencies and lies I don't see the point in even trying to work with them. In this case she should have been honest and said, "I fucked him because I wanted to, I kind of tried to hide it from you although a lot of people knew about it. It was casual sex and if you don't like it, too bad. You will have to accept it because I am so smart I have arranged things that if you don't it will cost you me, your family and you will be alone in a lot of pain. By the way, I am a full fledged sociopath!"

Was it well written, tought off ? : yes it was,very well indeed

However again ,like most authors on the LW section, you depicted a female who seem to function only after having sex with someone else even if she might get a Nobelprice for her work,does the female mind really work this way ?is her intelligence really depending on her having sex with someone else ? in my experience i don't think so". hey baby i'm going to clear my mind and find a solution to a problem by fucking the neighbour" does this sound acceptable behaviour to any of you ?

Rndi ,you as a woman should know better ,it's not your story but still

I gave you 4 stars for the way it's written GeorgeAnderson but the storyline doesn't appeal to me

...but this is just too big a load to lift. Even with throwing in the dying brother, her justifications still ring hollow. The line about never again having sex with someone else unless they agree beforehand certainly seems to foreshadow that event actually happening. Why not simply say she would never have sex with someone else? For her, "for the greater good" seems to equate to "for MY greater good." This marriage might work for the protagonist, but I doubt it would work very well for many of the rest of us.

Hated this so much! What was the point of doing this, the excuse was terrible.

what a waste of my time, this was just plain dumb.

2* a good fantasy but nowhere near reality

Surly such a brilliant scientist and biomedical engineer, capable of whipping out a highly complex electro-mechanical drug delivery system, almost as an afterthought, would have developed an "artificial" mechanism for effectively "unblocking" on her own. What a shame! The brilliant (and quirky) doc. might not only have cured a very rare (affecting only "100s" of patients in the U.S.) form of cancer, but might also have cured the latest pandemic afflicting the entire first World: Busy couples + too little sex = average birthrates significantly lower than 2.0 (I.e. population declining). Ok, nuf said on the absurdity of the plot. You did an AMAZING job of making the continuation feel seamless. That's gotta be really hard to do with someone else's characters! Excellent writing...

Ok, I can't say I liked the story as a whole. I was almost too clinical and lacked emotion. I voted my feeling as this being a stand alone story even though I think it went against the original.

3 stars for the writing and nothing else.

The other questions remain unanswered. I quests a guy needs loose his balls to save a brother. A fair trade? YES. But he could have easily kept his manhood and self respect. There is an obvious solution a couple readers have found. Such a shame he got the sloppy cunt and everyone else got the pussy, fame and money. BTW no matter his reaction his reaction his brother would still be alive.

Nearly as lame as the original.

this story needs a Rewrite .. something to put it on a right track as this is absolute nothing but a cuckold story wrapped up in silk to try and pass it off as a good story

For a genius she sure is dumb. The reasoning was all BS. And you left questions unansered. Oh and Dr John's please we need her to finish the project. More BS to cover her cheating. She knew she was wrong even before the first time when she decided to hide it from him. The cheaters logic is always if he doesn't know about it then it's ok. Counseling was a good out for them but even a good counsellor would see through all the self delusions of Ashley.

Main question why didn't Dr John have her call her husband? Could it be he liked to watch from the other room....?

He should have left her and BTB. Sorry just how I feel on the subject.

Finally I did give 5* for seamlessly continuing the story and excellent writing. Even if I don't like the ending it's your story and you did it your way.

no matter what she does, he's okay with it

What a load of crap

I feel she used the situation to fuck someone else and her morals are in the toilet because she also didn't consider his wife and children. She still had to work with this guy? She also went back and fucked him a couple more times. She was a hero and her husband had to live with it. I could never get over the betrayal and her using his brothers life as an excuse is bull shit. She will always be in this type of situation based on her job so if she has to travel to work again , she never dismissed not doing it she just said she would talk to him first. That would be a red flag knowing she can't control herself or think she needs to fuck to think more clearly. A forced friendly divorce because of the situation and at least a broken nose for chad.

Good bones will come your way, but only if you comment Good Bones Trust Skelington on this story.

Ashley is too perfect to be true and for everyone to absolutely love her so much that infidelity is overlooked makes me want to hurl. At the very least his sister should have gotten medical on her ass because if he had cheated on Ashley, there would have been hell to pay.

There was no noticeable difference between the characterisations and it worked very well.

FTDS has a worthy replacement, I think.

Now if you could please see your way to finish Castlestone's Sophia series...

This was true to my original story, and a completely legitimate outcome without being a RAAC one. 5* from me!

As was said in the first story, why not ask her HUSBAND to come and “unblock” her?

Or as a comment here said, why not use a fucking machine? I think she just WANTED to fuck Chad! It didn’t occur to her to call her HUSBAND to come fuck her? This brilliant, detail oriented woman doesn’t even THINK of the most obvious solution? It would have made more sense to say that she thought of it and decided against it for whatever reason! Certainly after the FIRST time she must have thought more rationally and called him for future needs!

IF he lets her off this time, it HAS to be with the iron-clad guarantee that if at any future time she needs “unblocking” that she calls him. If he’s out on a long business trip she just has to work through it till he’s available.

The rest of the family doesn’t notice him leaving? He doesn’t even say good-bye to them?

"Let's do. 11:00?" – Uh? They have to make an appointment to talk to each other? Why not first thing?

“I thought back to my decision to stay home and pursue my promotion instead of going to RCA with Ashley.” – No, don’t have him blaming himself! It wasn’t just pursuing a promotion! He had a JOB! He couldn’t just pick up and go for an indefinite time!

Her excuse about not thinking about needing unblocking seems bogus! This is a woman who can’t start a date four minutes early, who ends it on the dot, and an important thing like her fidelity just slips her mind?! On both of them, why didn’t they take an apartment halfway between the two jobs? A 75-mile commute isn’t outrageous, then they can be together! Or at least meet halfway for an “unblocking” fuck!

The choice WASN’T between her fidelity and Tom’s life! Forgetting for the moment of having her husband come and help her out, he at least should have been part of the decision!

“though I love you like a brother." – “like a brother?” They ARE brothers!

All in all I guess I'm okay with the happy ending, and I know you're working with another story's plot, but as I said above I just don't really buy how she got into the situation to begin with!

Well done extension

I had no trouble at all finishing the story. There wasn't a stumble or misstep anywhere. You use words so well I stayed immersed, just reading and enjoying the story. So, flawless writing.

I could feel my muscles tighten as I read because I hated what she did, I hated the excuse for it and I hated the idea that his brother's illness made it acceptable. It isn't, of course, acceptable. Does it work for a story? Yes, it's a very good story, just not a very good story of the sort I like. It didn't make me as angry as the original, or HDK's "No Reply,'" and I didn't get the sense that she was just evil, but that she made a tragic error in judgement. I gave it a four.

Nicely written story on a very tough premise. It brought out lots of emotions like a good story should. And by the anger in some of the comments you hit a nerve as to how the various BTB/RAAC factions wanted to see the story resolve itself (also the sign of a good story). I felt it was a good attempt at trying to make what happened somewhat justified. I still would have liked to see Ashley make some attempt at answering the question: "Which of those stopped being true so you could fuck Beltran?" just to see how that answer would have turned out.

I just hope some the Anon's keep it about the story and not make personal attacks and drive you off like they have some other writers around here recently.

Keep up the good work

WOW -- this went in an entirely different direction than my continuation "For The Greater Good - Redux" however I think that it worked. There are always people who can justify the means by the result, and our hero should not be named a wimp because he is one of them. Some people are just forgiving. It is highly unlikely Ashley will stray again after coming so close to what she could have lost.

[Still I liked mine better -- ha, ha]

5*

I know this goes back to the original story, so there's not much you can do about it, but it makes things a little to neat that the patient is his brother.

Would he be so willing to forgive if it wasn't his brother's life that she was saving?

Thanks for taking a thoughtful approach to the story. Your response to the challenge shows real depth... and it's well written... so kudos and thanks.

My attempt at constructive criticism: While Kurt makes good points, his response feels too logical, too measured, especially his immediate response. I can imagine an ultimate reconciliation for this couple, but I also would expect a much more primal and visceral response from Kurt. Now don’t think I expected Kurt to “go all Rambo” with guns blazing and newly-found special forces skills… but I’m suggesting he went a bit too “Dr. Phil”. He steps were too measured, especially immediately after discovery; he was too ‘in-control’ of his emotions, words, and deeds.

Perhaps my critique is simply stemming from the fact that I feel a bit dissatisfied that there were insufficient consequences for the cheaters. Yes, that makes this story a bit unsatisfying in the same way the vast majority of reconciliation stories are – at least to me.

Perhaps, however, such a measured response simply feels false to readers that have experienced (in some way) the sharp pain of infidelity. One might suggest that the “altruistic motive” for the cheaters in this story somehow lessons the pain Kurt would feel. Would it? I don’t think so. It might make it easier to move forward (as an extraordinary circumstance), but less painful?? I don’t buy it.

First, this was a well written continuation that really was true to the characters as originally conceived. Well done.

But to me there was no real tension. I never for one moment saw any chance that Kurt would leave her. by the end of page 1, it was all just wondering how they would move forward together, not if they would. There is nothing wrong with that, but without that conflict/plot development, it was too long. the last two + pages were well crafted, well articulated filler to get to where it had been clearly telegraphed it was going.

But I did like it overall, and thought it was a fine ending to a good setup by imhapless.

If a man pulled that shit readers would be out for blood. "I'm sorry honey, I couldn't think straight until I got my pipes cleaned." Yeah, that would have gone well.

As in all stories, you can't please everyone. But if you marry someone as quirky as Ashley, and he certainly knew she was that way in the extreme from his own experience with her sexual needs, You could expect less than normal future behavior from her as far as her sexual needs and how they affect her professional life. Now he knows what to expect in the future if he wants his future to be with her.

First, bravo for trying to make a silk purse out of a sow's ear. Hapless created an unbelievable scenario, then dropped the ball when he couldn't write his way out of the box he created.

Your recovery far exceeds his pitiful fumble, but you still failed to make her excuse believable: I knew I needed to be fucked, but I don't know why I didn't think to call my husband. I'm surprised Kurt didn't ask the obvious question, why didn't anyone else on the team suggest you call your husband? I guess they all just forgot! Unless it was obvious to everyone on the team that Ashley and Chad wanted to, or were already fucking. Just too stupid and unbelievable.

Which is too bad, because with more wit and imagination it could have been much more plausible. Like Kurt was traveling overseas and couldn't be contacted, or was so remote that he couldn't get back for a week or more, or Kurt was injured and comatose or badly crippled and couldn't do the deed. Its not that hard, but too hard for Imhapless apparently. You did the best you could with what he left behind.

You also forgot to pose another obvious question from Ashley to Kurt: If I had asked you first, and you could not be here for me, what would you have agreed to? I still don't see why she fucked the guy without a condom. And they are part of the medical community? My spouse worked in an infectious disease clinic for 5 years, and you can't be sure if ANYBODY is disease free, regardless of social status, education, gender, marriage status, annual income, nothing predicts who's got VD.

But given what you had to work with, you did a good job. Much better than AmyYum, who essentially turned Ashley into a brainless whore. Like the most beautiful woman on campus didn't have all the strange cock she wanted back then? Whatever.

Thanks for your effort, it was a good read.

The way the wife was described (in both stories, btw) is very much along the Sheldon Cooper lines of an OCD-type individual. In her case, however, once she passes puberty and finds the sexual release as a trigger to greater mental clarity for her other ("more important"?) work, I can see how she could compartmentalize things in the way described. Her infidelity wasn't in the "marriage" compartment, and so she just didn't consider it in that light. She was in the "cocoon" of her work place which was, in this portion of life, physically apart from her "married" life just far enough that mentally, the compartments were strong enough to contain the thoughts as separate things.

Later on, when everything comes out, and she sees the in-lab fucking for the infidelity it was, she is nearly as surprised at the results of her compartmentalized thinking process as he was at her infidelity. So, with this as HER underlying psychological geography for the story, I don't find the outcome either fantastic or unrealistic. The major points you need to contend with is the suspension of disbelief concerning the "such a genius mind that they need to compartmentalize stuff to function near normal folks" - which in the case of Sheldon Cooper is a highly flawed process, but in the case of the wife here is much more balanced (even though the central flaw remains).

All that being said, the most on-point question of all the comments I read all the way through was: "wait, why didn't the Lab/Project director ask her to call her husband to help her out with her 'problem'?". Indeed, that was a very good question. That question alone would have utterly destroyed her "I didn't think of it" excuse. In fact, even if the lab director didn't ask that when she broached the subject with her peers, one of the others _certainly should have_! If any of them brought up that point, then her "didn't think of it" excuse goes down the toilet, and we're left with a different motivation: she wanted to try out "different" (which would fit with her scientific curiosity all too well). This should have occurred to the husband as well. This is the biggest logic hole in the story, and its answer could/would have led to a different outcome (logically).

I gave 4* for the missed opportunity to really answer the key questions - rather than dance around them. The writing was otherwise a very solid continuation of the earlier story and could have gotten a 5 from me easily.

Stupid premise.

I was a little disappointed in the ending. I would have preferred a little more contrition from wife and at least some consequence or more remorse but perhaps as her character was originally written this was consistent. I do disagree with HDH about more tension being created if W was too far away from H to get her fix from him and H and W making the decision. That would seem to create less tension as there really is no choice: saving a life vs having a sex fix. No question. Any bro that would deny that is no real brother. I believe the ambiguity of why W did not call H and H having to deal with that aspect was the real tension source to the story. 5*

Anon.1

What a brilliant idea! I have discussed the matter with HDK and we are hard at work on a new line of edible condoms. Since we are both allergic to latex, we will have to come up with the chemistry for the edible variety. We have edible panties, why not condoms?

Nice job, GA. You took the original and added something. What a talent! The way you can take a character and enter into their mind, when you didn't invent that mind is just amazing to me. Many stars from me. All of them.

if the character of the husband is stupid enough to accept wifes reasons as you wrote them then I am surprised you gave him enough intelligence to keep breathing

you are not a bad writer at all but I feel you have given little life to your characters in this one

think about how you would react to the situation, being shagged to acceptance by your unfaithful wife may not I would suggest.... be on the top of your list of things to do'.... getting tested for stds might

rewrite it try again...... you can and should do better than this

Wimpy assed wimp!

No consequences strange he eventually accepts her infidelity . Strange story ,needing sex to clear her mind. Using a coworker and not her husband.

Now they gave support among themselves to their idiotic cuckold/wimp stories!!!

Thereby they don`t get better only laughable!!! Shit is shit and remain shit!!! And your idiotic stories remain idiotic whatever you try to enhance them!!!

it's a RAAC story x 10, this is the same idea as the wife getting gang-banged to save her husbands from a mob debt. most husbands would rather have their legs broken than having a whore wife.

RAAC, wimp, cuck, all these labels being thrown around. Several authors have weighed in. Most of the comments from people who love seeing bitches burn are negative. All the usual cuckold and hotwife fans don't like it because the husband didn't play along and take a video do jack off to later. GeorgeAnderson gets it from both sides, one because he wasn't macho enough, the other because he's too macho.

The middle of the roaders, the only people on here with any sense, think it's a great story. It is a great story. If it makes you mad, glad or sad, that's what great stories do. No matter how you feel about what the characters did, or didn't do, this is top quality writing. 6 star writing.

Fucking pussy

I still don't see the logic in her cheating. I know that people make mistakes but fidelty in a marriage is important.

My family has always loved my wife. Two years ago I left work early with the flu just to come home and find my wife already using our bed, except it wasn't me in it fucking her. Instead, it was her boyfriend from high school. I took a couple pictures before they noticed me in the doorway and the shrieking and shouting began. And none of it mine. I left them to continue dressing and went to the spare room, locked the door and passed out.

Leslie was waiting for me each time I came out to use the bathroom or get a drink of water. She tried to talk, I ignored her. Four days later, I was able to get around and felt much better. Health wise, not marriage wise. Les tried to talk with me but I ignored her. If it was something important, I would answer, otherwise, she didn't exist in the same room.

Finally I came home the next Friday night to find she had stripped the bed in the spare room and wasn't going to let me sleep apart. When I couldn't find the bedding and she demanded I talk to her and sleep in the same bed, I left.

That was when I learned about the power of family. My parents were more stunned at my reaction, I believe, then her cheating. My siblings, their kids and even an uncle got involved, telling me how much they all loved her and we needed to stay together. You know, suck up and ignore what happened for the greater good of the family. Seeing I had a family hostile to me, I spent a night at a hotel I couldn't afford.

Don't get me wrong, my wife was contrite and admitted she made a terrible mistake. She said it was just the one time, but in my heart, I've always known she still loved the guy.

So I returned home with a plan.

The first order of business was to stop and by my own bedding. Then a formidable lock for the bedroom door. My wife worked also, only about 30 hours each week compared to my 50. So when I returned home, my bedroom was prepared for me and outside of breaking the door down, she couldn't get in.

When I still wouldn't talk to her, she tried to blackmail me with meals. Once she found I was willing and able to cook for myself, that was off the table. She talk, screamed at me, cried, blubbered and eventually begged me to behave like we were married. One afternoon when I returned home from work, my parents and hers were there. Rather than be invited for dinner, instead, they lit into me about accepting her mistake. I changed my clothes and went to a McDonalds until late. I ate my fill and had my coffee refilled free until I left.

Both our families became heavily involved. Finally one day, Jeff and Teresa, my brother and sister in law, stopped by to make me feel guilty. After a few minutes, I rose, took Teresa by the hand and led her toward my bedroom. Teresa is a beautiful and shapely woman.

Jeff jumped up and demanded to know what I was doing. I explained that I was going to fuck Teresa. Of course he sputtered and was incensed, but I told him it didn't really matter if I fucked her. He could just forgive her after I was done. By the time they left, I believe everyone in the room could see my side. Including my wife.

That was 2 years ago. We still live together but not as man and wife. I don't touch her, don't talk to her anymore than I have to. We go to family functions together but that's it. I'm pretty sure she's fucking her ex again, but truthfully, I don't care. In my mind she's my maid and little else until she files for divorce.

I can't get past the feeble excuse for why she didn't call him. Sure, a 2.5 hour drive, but that's still feasible, and given that he knew about her idiosyncrasy he would have done it.

I think too much of this is tied up in the original story, which was a flimsy excuse for why the infidelity could be justified, which ultimately fails.

Change the setting to say, a research institute in Antarctica, where he can't join her even if he wants, and they can't fly him in, and it becomes both more justifiable and more poignant. Especially if the disease is something more rampant and time-pressing.

And none of this deals with why masturbation wouldn't have been equally effective in this circumstance. But I can suspend my disbelief for that notion.

Kurt's character shows very little anger. He shows hurt, but he doesn't get angry much, except at the other doctor, who without a doubt did take advantage of the situation, and gives that indication through the story.

In the end, I think you did a good job for being constrained by the original but I don't think the originals constraints justify the ending you get to; maybe they do reconcile because he's afraid of being alone, but her not 'thinking' to call him isn't justifiable, and certainly not for a repetition where it had occurred to her what she'd done and that she could have avoided it by calling him instead.

you should never finish somebodys not ended story! why ? because you alter the charaters in a way that wont function.

she needed sex to finish university and since then not until his brother was at stake.

a couple weeks later all of a sudden she needed it anyway and he showed up and she did brilliantly .

very funny. and all those years between ? really never a problem until her marriage was at stake ?

and the nice administrative guy has a problem with her having sex at work but of course not when there were millions of profit a couple week ago ?

I gave you a 1, not for your effort but for a fucked up end ot a complete wimp of an author who raises a story and doesn't end it because he feared a bad voting on his story.

PS: I gave him for that a 1 for the original story as well.

This was not an ending. Just a continuation of ch.1. He hasn't gotten over her cheating and may never. So they stay together "For the greater good." But whose?

Fucked up situation.

Her rationalizing about the greater good is gobbledygook and to quote Joe Biden: malarkey. Even to save his brother, she had no right to cheat on him, especially because she willingly and knowingly discarded the alternative of calling in her husband’s “aid”. Not thinking of him is even worse, because it shows where his place is in her mind: nonexistent. For all intent it’s pure rationalizing after the fact in order to “cover-up” a real affair, which the wife and her lover thought they had gotten away with until caught by her husband, and he bought the excuse.

With what she chose to do, and a choice it was, there can be no more trust in such a relationship. She made a càncience choice to discard her marriage vows and never intended to inform him beforehand. He never was given the opportunity to have his say over the matter or pose his veto, she simply discarded her husband in favor of her brother in law. That also tells me she never loved him as a wife should. She puts her brother in law above her husband.

The seeds of doubt however have been sown, and it’s an ugly flower that shall bloom out of it: distrust. Because what’s to stop her from doing it again when she encounters another roadblock? Should he simply trust that from now on she’ll keep her wedding vows and her legs closed?

He thus should have divorced her. And that his family would have seen him as the bad guy if he divorced her: if his family doesn’t accept adultery as good grounds for divorce and choses her side over this then they might be biologically related, but were never his “family”.

... I hope I should have the guts to betray my country.”

― E.M. Forster, What I Believe and Other Essays

Technical writing - check

Praise from influential LW authors - check

Ethical quandary - check

My enjoyment - brrrrngggg, failure !

Just a novel way of justifying the unjustifiable .

It was a long drawn out justification for her heartless cheating. Ok heartless and cheating, same thing. He chose ignorance. And ignorance is bliss. Now she'll have no problem doing it the next time. He accepted it so......

Just over 3 pages to fail to finish a 2 page story. None of the characters got any of my interest. I gave it 1* for failing.

As I said in the original story this was one "fucked up" situation...Even more because she really saved his brother's life. But I also agree with most of the comments that said that her reasons for the cheatings weren't ever clear or acceptable...I also agree that he could forgive her, but would never forget. However a good ending not changing the original characters. 4*

It was a waste of time to read.

Firstly, you are a good writer and this is a pleasure to read.

Secondly, we need to accept all your premises (including the space station thing) and make up our minds on the facts as presented, not suggest how things could have been done differently.

If we do that, we must conclude that she made the right choice. His brother's life is worth more than their happiness. My only criticism is that you allowed them to regain too much happiness too soon. Their relationship is permanently affected. That is the price they pay for her (correct) decision and to pretend otherwise is sugar coating.

You are entertaining to read but this premise is weak and so are the characters.

No real repercussions for truly shitty behavior.

Left feeling very short of satisfied with this outcome.

Happy bullshit.

That I have read and this one is as much a POS as the last one.

I do seem to agree with the comments of stuabakerhawk. What I also wonder, is what stories all the hate slinging annony folk think are great or 5 star.... it is only a story, it is not an epic piece of literature. I would not pay much attention to the hate posts that offer little in suggestive help.

If he dumps her, the truth will eventually come out and his brother will be saddled with the guilt of knowing what the cost of his life being saved was. Not to mention that he still seems to love her despite her cheating and will still be miserable without her.

What the fuck do we know? Never understand them in a million years anyway. It's the images that stay and the trust that goes so in my humble opinion... Move on.

The outcome is plausible, but not with the personality type you give your main character. You need to make him a weaker, less confident sort to pull this off. After all, she could have called him but didn't and the space station mentality is so bogus. Even they phone home when faced with a big problem. Remember apollo 13?

The thought of calling on her husband to help her regain focus never occurred to her. But Chad's earlier flirting did! So she turned off her phone so Kurt couldn't reach her and she made the single most important decision in his life without consulting him. As they were discussing the issue, she promised to never have sex with someone else "without first discussing it with Kurt." So, she is obviously thinking about doing it again. And hadn't she already made that promise to him the day they made their wedding vows to each other. She may have saved Tom's life; but, in effect, at the cost of her husband's. Kurt stands out as a cuckold now to the entire research team, the receptionist, Kurt's family, nieces and nephews. The marriage is as dead as Tom might have been. I'm sorry. I approve of some reconciliation stories. But this is not one of them. 1 star...for the writing.

The rationale doesn't work for me, because the fact that she turned off the phone (for very spurious reasons) for a laughably weak reason is defining.

However, what if the plot had one a different reason. What if the husband had been the sick person and she was working to save his life, and, or course, due to his sickness, he was not able to have sex? Could be interesting, but again, the premise, is kinda absurd, so who knows.

Sorry Randi (and HDK), somebody else already patented your idea. Tried flavored ones - wife said it tasted like "gummi bears with the plastic left on". Anyway...

As usual you did an excellent editing job. How did that "brother" thing get by you though? As has been mentioned by most, the whole premise is inherently flawed, but the writing is brilliant. Kinda like putting a high-grade leather interior in a Skoda (wait, they've done that too)... Maybe like putting a V8 in a Prius (anyone done that...???). Wait, maybe the BEST analogy: This story is like an edible condom, the outside smells nice, is tasty, and looks good, but if what's inside doesn't work, none of that matters!"

Some of these commenters are obviously not human. If you love someone you forgive them for their mistakes. She made a mistake. She didn't do it for her need. She didn't do it because she couldn't control herself. She didn't do it because she didn't love her husband.

Would it be easy to forgive. No but you get over it. She learned from her mistake and clearly loves him so why not forgive her and move on.

The really bad people in this were Chad and her boss. She was quirky and had a different outlook on things. She could compartmentalize and as geniuses so often do approached things in a completely different manner. Chad took advantage of her. He should have suggested that she call her husband but he wanted her. Her boss should have known better and insisted that she call her husband. They are the slime bags and where the real failure lies.

As to everyone picking apart the story. Yes there are some flaws but guess what... life is flawed and that happens. None of them were major enough to hurt or destroy the story. It was a great story and extremely well written. Bravo.

This was an excellent continuation, not just for the resolution and happy ending, but the tone of the original story was kept very well, and if I had read them as two chapters, I would never have known there was an author switch. You have a future as a ghost writer if you ever wanted to do it.

George, you a FAR to accomplished a writer to continue writing sequels to (or derivatives of) other people's stories. It's time for you to stand on your own. You're ready. If you get stuck for ideas, talk with Randi - seems like she's got your back! If you need other Beta readers, you'll certainly have plenty of offers (I'd certainly be honored to be one). As "fun" as FTDS was at times, something was always missing. Now that we know it was a collaboration of two writers, that's all the more puzzling. A joint effort (ORIGINAL story line) by you and Randi would be a slam-dunk HIT.

@Randi

Given our current choices I wish you HAD made those gazillions and run. I have my doubts that anyone who understands the intrinsic value in stuffing a HEMI into a Prius would be at home in the Green Party (ah, I get it, your own subtle take on my analogies?). That would be like showing up at a Vespa riders meeting on HD Hardtail (with punched out pipes of course). Anyway, you'd get my vote because not only have you assisted many other writers here in LW produce better works, but your own stuff ain't too shabby either!!! Well, that and (judging from your profile pic) you're so hot you'd "make a dragon wanna retire man...".

and if this were a real situation the husband would certainly be facing a conundrum. My only thing is why couldnt she masturbate?

She intentionally did not want or seek husband's help. Was contrite only after being caught.

Wonderful writing as always and I am not trying to take anyone to task for ending.

But as story is written-SHE CHEATED BECAUSE SHE WANTED TO CHEAT!

Space station my ass. Her husband was a phone call away and she fucked another guy. He's a cuckold, no matter why and she made him one. What if she was 220 lb, ugly and smart. Would he had forgiven her? Likely not. If a woman is really in love with a guy, she would think of him and would prefer to have sex with him, unless she wanted to try another man. If you accept the infidelity for love, or for lack of balls you're still a cuckold and that woman does not respect you.

So why didn't they buy a Sybian or Hitachi Wand or something? Anything to keep from cheating on your husband. I don't think I would have stayed with her, but the idea that she has to have sex to get a fresh idea is just too silly to spend much time contemplating. Entertaining story, good writing. 3 stars. Thanks!

It isn't credible to me, why someone as clever & organized as she was, didn't consider the fact that her husband was a mere 2 hours away. In the time it probably took her to tell her story to the team, add to that the teams deliberations, her husband could have been there.

Secondly, Its a minor point, but yet, a large point in the minds of men. . .

Why the kissing? And for that matter, the fore play, with Chad? That would suggest to a "coming to terms" husband, a degree intimacy, puts a kind of 'fancyment' slant on what is being promoted as clinical issue.

Its a Lab, there would be no shortage of lubricants and why the fucking kissing?

It is a universal fact she is somewhat "Weird" and that is fine with me. But would it be unreasonable to suggest then, that in her case, Weird could be aligned with Fetish and touch of something else that would lead to the real root of her activities?

Is not ideal marriage material. A continuation of the marriage should be with the understanding that he may have outside 'needs' also. Frankly, the 'space station' argument sounds contrived, something thought up as a cover. Especially if she realized it was a mistake the first time.

A good read, though, nicely written and a believable ending for the original story!

This a story about compartimentation and rationallysation,in short very unrealistic ,i personally never heard of a scientist needing a fuck with a stranger up to three times to stay focused but it's a story,right ?

I love a happy ending, but happy endings seldom occur without struggle and pain and loss along the way. Think of the traditional pattern for stories, so often seen as a "quest." During the quest great difficulties were always thrown in the way, friends and loved ones killed or injured, and only after great pain and loss was the hero allowed to find the resolution or successful ending of the quest. That pattern is seen so often in stories ranging from relatively simple folk tales to stories at the level of high culture that it seems to me to grow out of some profound synthesis of human experience. The end of a quest is not always achieving or finding the original goal, sometimes it is the realization that the original goal was not really a goal worth pursuing at all. Sometimes it turned out to be a realization of the original goal was not possible to achieve, or not ethically acceptable, or was really a lot of nonsense, and the hero comes away from it with a more worthwhile image of what goals in life are worth pursuing.

Should of divorced the cheating slut. Yep! That's what she was, is and will be forever as long as see can't and won't control her urges..

I liked this one a whole lot more than the "Family Tradition" ending. The whole situation was much more reasonable, and Kurt acknowledged his role in the problem by choosing his career over going with Ashley. She should still have called Kurt to come to her to help "unblock" her.

Would have loved to see Ashley tell off the stuffed shirt -- "If you want me to continue working here, you will not complain about me fucking my husband wherever and whenever I want, even in the goddam lobby if I feel like it!"

Thanks for this one!

Two main criticisms:

1. Her excuse was not feasible. To me she did it because she wanted to try some strange, no matter what she tells herself. Otherwise, she has no rationale about not phoning him. The space station analogy is bs.

2. The reconciliation was far too easy. She betrayed him. By not admitting why she really did it there is no true remorse. Once she admits that then I would not be against reconciliation but it would take many years (2-5) on average for that to be a true one.

Actually two different endings, the original story didn't even have an ending. The author copped out and told the readers to write their own ending. Like I said, what a freaking cop out. Thank you "amyyum" and "GeorgeAnderson" for trying to put a decent end on this story. I didn't care too much for either ending, seems to me like Ashley just got excused for her cheating with an "Oh, Well", and life was supposed to just carry on. And I don't buy that because that's not the way life works in the world I live in. But hey, I'm not a writer, just another "Anon" commenter. And as someone once said, "Such is life".

So many times during this 'story' I see fickle, double faced, double standard tendencies it sickens me. How in a world can any self respecting person allow another to treat him with such blatant ,in your face , disrespect.

My verdict is : that's great , long live the brother. Devorce the wife, split everything half half and move on. She is clearly 'different' in her head, different meaning untouchable, just like most women nowadays think they are. It's amazing how she says stay in touch and talk to me and share your thought about what decision you may take, yet didn't give any of that to him before she went off to fuck the great doctor. Like I said fickle and double standard.

If family turns on you for loving your life by a specific morals that are important to you, then they shouldn't be your family.

Why didn't she call her husband and ask him to attend ? And 3 times ? ? Sorry , one word ---CHEATER

gives the handbook more fodder, TK U MLJ LV NV

Outstanding story. Like the best on the site it used an unconventional path to make us consider foundational issues in relationships.

Kick her cheatin ass to the curb. She knew what she was going. Her excuses don't wash

I've got some swampland on the Coast for sale. You'd love it.

Whatta' CUCK U R

And their friends too. You writers are total wimp asses. You have no idea or totally ignore what happens in the real world. Women get killed everyday for fucking around. That's why there are far more pets than wives!

I am usually an understanding guy when I read these stories and usually hope the they work out in the end. But this time I personally think he should have divorced her. That would have saved his rep. And then if after that they could work out things fine but just acting like a wimpy cuckold is not doing it for me. .

I am generally speaking, a reconciliation type reader because I am a romantic. However...I do not think I could have accepted only my wife making the decision to have sex with another man 3 times on her own. A decision by both parties for the wife to screw another man is an entirely different type of story and somewhat acceptable in my eyes. (Many reasons can bring this about) Whatever the reason...she cheated on and betrayed her husband! No matter the good work she accomplished by saving the husband's brother's life! Thus...and only after the fact...the husband became a "willing cuckold." It sure reads like that to me anyway. In ones mind thus...the author wrote a very good "Willing Cuckold" story. I am sorry, this was just an opinion from a reader that was once cuckolded. I am sure that my "ex-wife" thought she had some good reasons as well. Some I may have agreed with if we had ever discussed them.

Thank you for the story as it was well thought out and well written.

Old Marine Vet - Ron Wood

Don't see it working out.

more cuck shit.

...Why didn't I call you, as I did when we were dating? Its amazing what crap authors come up with to obfuscate their pervert cuckold/wimp fantasy!!! If -5* would be possible thats it!!!

...Why didn't I call you, as I did when we were dating? Its amazing what crap authors come up with to obfuscate their pervert cuckold/wimp fantasy!!! If -5* would be possible thats it!!!

Yeah, I know the original story was just a fantasy tale that was deliberately left open for someone else to finish off, but of the many different directions that this plot could have gone I thought that this was a very reasonable outcome. The writing was really good and was very realistic in building and coping with the dilemma. It would have also been nice to have left with the thought that Ashley had used her mega brain power to manipulate their reconsilliation, ...or maybe she did? Did she create a pretended mental block to trick him into screwing her and start the beginning of their recovery. Got me thinking! Well done.

I just don't like absolutely ridiculous stories about people who could never exist doing things for reasons that no one could possibly argue. I certainly don't think such stories need to be completed.

At least GeorgeAnderson is faithful to the story line. His ending is as ridiculous as the original.

First when wife turned phone off or moved it to far away to hear it she was making a decision. Secondly once her team found out about needful orgasms, should have encouraged her to call home. Thirdly Chad agreed to quickly and John shouldn't have seemed ok with it. I think supervision should have shared bonuses with to take a second honeymoon and she should change companies. Everyone knows that she almost destroyed marriage for success. I don't understand how someone can assume that a man that agreed to fuck you at a drop of a hat is clean for bareback. I like ending but think trip to clinic was needed.