Comments on Novels and Novellas

Private Pyle to Space Admiral to Pope.

At first I didn’t like how she couldn’t escape but I love how you wrapped it up. I loved this, I couldn’t get enough. Thank you

Bill needs a beating, a serious beating that doesn’t have a sexual element. Regardless of Toni’s subterfuge, Bill still raped her, and drugged Robert without his consent. Financial ruin, reputation destroyed, double testectomy, and permanent chemical feminization. Voila: rapist...

The author is a word master who spins word pictures of physical and emotional turmoil Between Roman and Belladonna. Every sentence is full of tension between the two. He is a sophisticated club owner, criminal, and killer, while she's a fashion photographer and organizer/planner who...

Disappointed with the turn of events in this one. Bill and Debra have to pay for their actions. Should use Hal to make them bankrupt and lose everything.

Bloody good as usual. Thank you

I’ve been to Rome three times. Such a beautiful city. I could spend a week there and still only see a fraction of what I’d like to see. Italy is one of my two favorite places to visit in the world.

Loved the portion of the story with Gina. It was a growth moment for Pilgrim....

Fake left, fake right and leave us all with heads spinning and wondering what comes next! How does the sim really work and how does it relate to/interact with the real world? If the admiral really can’t be killed, what about Nika and Anna? Are they actually dead or just taken off...

You realy fucked it up didn't you

“Breed me lover, breed me”. Linda is stupid in every version of February sucks but she takes it to the next level in this one.

One can only wish to give the Russians hell!

Well that went downhill fast !!!

Loved where this went-did not see it coming and that is always a lovely surprise! Thank you for this wonderful gift.

Bravo! You are so amazing, Brandi! I'm so impressed by all the accurate knowledge you show in the volcanology, cars, boats/ships, etc. I get so annoyed when I buy a book where the author gets details completely wrong when a little internet research would have fixed it. I'm really...

I couldn't make it past all the way too sly sex talk and vivid descriptions. I know this is Literotica but it just wasn't for me. I've enjoyed some of your other works. I look forward to something different.

It’s like not being able to binge a good show. Great story!

More! The story about Erin hits hard and needs a resolution!

I'm really enjoying the "this is a simulation" turn of events. I wonder what your next trick is?

what a tease, what is the experiment ?

Come on, surely you did some sort of story plan?

Where the heck are the remaining chapters??

So this was a nice intro, but as a story on its own? Forget it. Disappointing.

I really liked the mutual masturbation scene and like your writing . Very believable characters

Thank you , very sexy story

More story less sex. Kinda missed the transition from Story one also.

Hey Comentarista82 - good catch on the name. There is still a word in English: peregrinations. Thank you, too, for your detailed comments. I'm awed by the time and thought you put into them. At this stage, there must be some who think that we are one and the same person (or at least...

That was a looong slow burn…brilliant.

While we await Ch 8, I will share this Spanish gem with other commenters: "Peregrino" aside from "pilgrim" means traveler, or "one that passes through strange lands (translated from the General Dictionary of the Spanish Language)," which fits him, also being time-displaced.

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I love this story, but I don't care how pretty the girl is, I wouldn't stay with her if she continually punished me for imagined slights. I would just tell her to have fun at the party and stay home.

Glad you're enjoying it. I should be submitting Chapter 12 this evening, which means it will probably be published in a few days here. I also have a Patron where you can read the chapter immediately, if you'd rather not wait. Hahaha

Hope you continue to enjoy.

What the hell happened between the first chapter and the 2nd chapter? How the heck did he go from the middle of university to tactical training????

One commenter calls the Main Character morally bankrupt. Another calls him degenerate swine.

Interesting that Literotica has an entire category celebrating such men - mind control. In that category, nearly every main character uses special powers to prey upon every woman they encounter....

Yeah, I had to go back to the beginning.

OK premise.

Disappointing, despite unexpected twist.

Just pain. And subjugation.

Two stars.

Good premise.

But sex is awfully rushed.

He's likely never eaten pussy before, but needs no instructions/directions.

She doesn't require him to tell her how enjoyable it is to bring her pussy so much pleasure with his mouth.

The pony-boy and the pain are just not my thing. They're...