Mind Control Story Comments

Very hot! Not crazy about the domination stuff but the rest was fun. Five stars and a favorite point!

I knew when I chose to read a story by you it would be hot. This one is beyond that for me. I love that most of the women transform when entering to work. The revenge was hot.. I was sad that the girl that felt sorry for what was happening to him had become so dumb. The idea of the...

Interesting concept. Very well thought out. I hope you do more with this.... it would be a rotten shame if you did not. As a first chapter, Its good. But as a finished product... not nearly so.

Hope we find out more about Melissa soon - is she a lesbian too? She seems to be living vicariously with those two. Is she genuinely bad or is she taking steps to hide who she is? Would love to start making sense of why she is doing this, I presume it'll become clearer as her plans...

Excellent. As a man I felt really inside the woman's skin. Thank you. 6 stars.

Personally, I don't get their inability to want to put the Sheik down. He was a monster, they all agreed. Monsters, especially HIS type of monster, need to be destroyed. Sorry to use an over-used example, but you don't let a rabid dog roam free, you put them down to prevent them from...

Love this. Love this couple. I hope they have a happy ending (together of course)

Very nicely written; of all the Quaranteam stories, this one is by far my favorite. As far as the couple negative comments goes; it's your story, write it however you like; you can't please everyone.

Hello. I'm a longtime writer and reader of your work. Would you allow me to finish the story of God App?

I parting Salute to one of the goats 🫡. You will be missed, wishing you the best in future endeavors.

Love the beginning, but can definitely tell this guy is from the eastern states. Victoria immediately closing borders? I never laughed so hard. WA and SA had hard border lockdowns in place quicker and longer than any other states, while good old Victoria caved to big business and...

I'm not crazy about the Shiek's "crimes" and having him tortured for weeks and publicized online would be an appropriate justice, but I understand why they won't do it. I would have liked less of the Shiek's behavior in the. Just too much. Still, I enjoy the overall story and anxiously...

You are a very good writer. I hope you return. Very few can convery the absolute anxiety and eroticism your stories do.

This story is just so surreal. No one can resist, and they don't even have any idea what's going on, not really. He's basically a god and can do what he wants without consequence. It's kind of boring in that respect although the hot sex scenes do help a lot.

It's so surreal but it is rather boring since it's all just the same stuff and no consequences or drama for the actions. I'm curious if any actual story will develop. Also, what's with the constant "anal sheath" usage? Not the first time I've noticed this. Maybe the author just loves...

Thank you for the critique! Actually, that's a great idea about the friend thing, I'm gonna steal that from you!

There are so many slaves / targets now I lost track of who that last one was supposed to be. It's just a string of random names with identical phrases used over and again to literally say what they're doing at least three times per session. I've just been skimming through to see who...

God damn, this is hot!

Glad you're enjoying it! I haven't quite figured out what will happen to Trey just yet, but it won't be good! :D

Thanks for the comments. I agree about wasted scout meetings. My thoughts are about things we wanted to do to some of our scout den mothers.

Thanks for the input. Good thoughts. I have a couple more Den Mothers ideas in the works, one involved incorporating some Girl Scouts in the mix.

I'm sorry to hear you're leaving, but thank you for these excellent stories. Best wishes for your future endeavors!

Omg!! This is a dream!

Melissa is obviously tripping on power big time. If she really wanted to screw Heather and Shona one last time, she would, on the night of graduation, return them to their pre-powder status and cause them to forget each other. Deliver one final blow and walk away knowing what she...

You can see the next chapter already at the other site, mcstories.com.

Wish he had met me. Saw my transness. Edited me. Would have been nice.

Simply perfect.

I feel like I'm missing something -- who is Professor Psyche? How is this a flashback tale?

I'm really enjoying this story, the evil bitch melissa controlling them, but Shauna and Heather still manage to find true love with each other. I hope Trey gets his comeuppance soon

It’s very rare to come across such a concise, warm story here, particularly in mind control. From bitter cruelty to education, awareness and grace, done with care and compassion. Well done.

Thanks for the kind words, Mike. Levi and Alina hold a special place in my heart as the favourite couple I have written to date. It was a sad moment, sending them off to a new future together but felt like the right place to end it. 😊

Great story as usual Grace, nicely paced and well written. So glad you are back writing again.

“ In a flash he realized the difference - Isabel somehow wasn't pregnant anymore! But how could that be possible?”

Did you mean Becca?

Please continue!!!!!

Hell yes. Looking forward to seeing all the goddesses have their chosen ones enslaved and the world fall into darkness.