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That was a looong slow burn…brilliant.

While we await Ch 8, I will share this Spanish gem with other commenters: "Peregrino" aside from "pilgrim" means traveler, or "one that passes through strange lands (translated from the General Dictionary of the Spanish Language)," which fits him, also being time-displaced.

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I love this story, but I don't care how pretty the girl is, I wouldn't stay with her if she continually punished me for imagined slights. I would just tell her to have fun at the party and stay home.

Glad you're enjoying it. I should be submitting Chapter 12 this evening, which means it will probably be published in a few days here. I also have a Patron where you can read the chapter immediately, if you'd rather not wait. Hahaha

Hope you continue to enjoy.

What the hell happened between the first chapter and the 2nd chapter? How the heck did he go from the middle of university to tactical training????

One commenter calls the Main Character morally bankrupt. Another calls him degenerate swine.

Interesting that Literotica has an entire category celebrating such men - mind control. In that category, nearly every main character uses special powers to prey upon every woman they encounter....

Yeah, I had to go back to the beginning.

OK premise.

Disappointing, despite unexpected twist.

Just pain. And subjugation.

Two stars.

Good premise.

But sex is awfully rushed.

He's likely never eaten pussy before, but needs no instructions/directions.

She doesn't require him to tell her how enjoyable it is to bring her pussy so much pleasure with his mouth.

The pony-boy and the pain are just not my thing. They're...

Good premise.

Nicely paced.

But all so one-sided. She doesn't touch his cock and/or balls at all. She doesn't have him jerk off while she watches and gives instructions.

She doesn't force him to inhale the scent of her pussy. Or to taste it (except on his fingers).

Four stars.

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Oh shit...yep I agree. Carry on.

Well done.

Still enjoying the series even if this chapter had no sex! Good job on your research

I cried like a baby. Thank you for finishing this story out

Hi.It's not an interesting story, I'm not too lazy to leave a comment.First of all, writing all three stories in one sucks.A father with a young daughter and a grandson with an old woman.These are completely different things.Different emotions.In my case, the grandson and the old...

Good but it’s always hard to rate a part of a series

So, 11 years after Jake and Jessica graduated?

A new story!!! 😁😁!!Yay!

5stars, of course.

Love this series and can't wait for the next one!

Damn. It was so good. As a Parvati myself in the world of imagination, I need a Conqueror like Mahmud to conquer me :))

Ordinary.

A word-smith that sets the tone of the story. Is he, or is he not? Her mind was filled with lust as she kissed him and as he brought her to an orgasm, and then had her taken home. Both of them were aroused and then disappointed.

Such writing is so affecting that I sit on the edge...

Quite an audition!

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****😴😴😴You fall a sleep😴😴😴; Slow start but I know you will come through!! Thanks for the tease!!!!!

@tenyari

When I looked up WSIM, it indeed said as an IBM acronym "Workload Simulator," and you may be right. After I looked it up (actually after ch 2), I wondered if we would have any "tells" that he was somehow hooked up to a neural interface.

great premise and plot, and pretty well written. But you either need to get a proofreader/editor or double-check your work and run it through Grammarly™ or another grammar/spelling checker.

@Anonymous... I have posted up to chapter 6, and am currently working on Chapter 7.

This is getting even funner. Carry on!

Great story i will reread it several times.

1 star. Unfinished, won’t be finished, series

1 star. Unfinished, won’t be finished, series